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The discussion about „Teenagers should not have their own computers because it is too dangerours“ becomes very popular, as there are more and more teenagers are victims about cybercrime at the present.
In the following comment I will discuss about the pro and negativ aspects about this topic.


First of all I think a computer at the present time is very necessary for our teenagers, because the computer give you so many opportunities. For example to do your homework or make a interview with your friends where are far away. But this not the only argument for computer. Furthermore you can looking high definition movies on the computer. Nevertheless, we have to look to our childeren and have to see the negativ aspects. I am of the same opinion that the parents have take a look about their teenager what they doing on the internet. Take for example, rogue contact requests of foreign peoples or that the teenager lose the reality about to much social networking. Moreover the scams potential on online shopping platforms for dewy-eyed teenagers are very high and realistic

Weighing the pros and cons, I come too the conclusion that a computer at the present time is a nessaecary equipment and pro aspects are outweigh in respect. I am completely agree that computer are a high risk for our teenager, but if the parents have watchful eye about their teenager I think the computer is a big enrichment nowadays.
Frage von Money_King | am 25.11.2013 - 19:47


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Antwort von Ratgeber | 26.11.2013 - 18:30
The discussion about „Teenagers should not have their own computers because it is too dangerous[B]“ becomes [B]more and more popular, since the number of teenagers, becoming victims of cybercrime, increases.

In the following comment I will discuss about the pro and negative aspects about this topic.

First of all I think that currently a computer is very necessary for our teenagers, because it offers so many opportunities, for example to search for your homework or to chat with your friends who are far away.
But this not the only argument for computer. Furthermore you can look high definition movies on the computer, if it has the suitable technology.
Nevertheless these positive aspects, we must take care of our children and also have to see the negative aspects.

Also I believe that parents should pay attention to what their children do on the Internet and which sides they visit. Take for example, contact requests of persons with criminal intent or the fact that the children can lose touch with reality by too much social networks . Moreover dewy-eyed children are increasingly victims by phishing or confidence tricks on online shopping platforms .

Weighing up the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that a computer at the present time is a necessary equipment and pro aspects are outweighing. I agree that computers are a high risk for our children, but if parents keep a watchful eye on their them, I think the computer will be a great addition.

So müsste es gehen...


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Antwort von haithabu (ehem. Mitglied) | 26.11.2013 - 20:18
Ich korrigiere mal die - gutgemeinte - Korrektur von "Ratgeber":

Zitat:
The discussion about „Teenagers should not have their own computers because it is too dangerous“ has become more and more popular, since the number of teenagers, becoming victims of cybercrime, has increased.
In the following comment I am going to discuss [---] the positive and negative aspects of this topic.

First of all I think that currently a computer is very necessary for our teenagers, because it offers so many opportunities, for example to look for their homework or to chat with their friends who are far away.
But this not the only argument for computers. Furthermore you can watch high definition movies on the computer, if it has the suitable technology.
Despite of these positive aspects, we must take care of our children and also have to see the negative aspects.

I also believe that parents should pay attention to what their children do on the Internet and which sites they visit. Take for example, contact requests of persons with criminal intent or the fact that the children can lose touch with reality by too many social networks . Moreover dewy-eyed children are increasingly victims of phishing or confidence tricks on online shopping platforms .

Weighing up the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that at the present time a computer is a necessary equipment and pro aspects are outweighing. I agree that computers are a high risk for our children, but if parents keep a watchful eye on [---] them, I think the computer will be a great supplementation.


@ Ratgeber: you`ve overlooked fifteen mistakes; if you can`t do any better, please keep off the English forum.


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Antwort von Money_King | 26.11.2013 - 21:28
Danke an haithabu und Ratgeber.

Weshalb wird hier die Form von has verwendet an einigen Stellen anstatt "have"?


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Antwort von haithabu (ehem. Mitglied) | 26.11.2013 - 22:30
Zitat:
Weshalb wird hier die Form von has verwendet an einigen Stellen anstatt "have"?



Schüler sollten schon in der 5. Klasse gelernt haben: "bei he-she-it im Präsens - -s geht mit"

wenn also ein Nomen hier im Singular steht , muss das -s angefügt werden.

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