Englisch Text korrigieren (Internet of things)

Hallo,
Ich bin sehr schlecht was Englisch angeht.

Kann mir bitte jemand diesen Text korrigieren.

Nowadays there are many discussions about the Internet if things.
In the following comment I will discuss why I like that. The Internet of things or abbreviated IoT is a system. The system makes it possible your appliances by WiFi to control und to monitor. You can control the appliances a thousand meters away. And own an energy-saving system. When you go out, it turns the appliances itself off. That makes you life more convenient. Nowadays we know is in smartwatches or fitness bands that count our steps and check our heartbeat. In the hospital help patients with health problems und can better monitored.