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The discussion about legalizing the use of recreational drugs is a topic which concerns more and more people because (1the number of the drug-users (2) rises from year to year. On the one hand society tells us about the danger of any drug (3), but on the other hand you learn that alcohol is okay. Even the fact (4)to be drunk is accepted by society. But does this make sense? Where is the difference between alcohol and marijuana? And can a strategy of legalization, education and taxation bring us a better solution than the present situation? (5) In this essay, I will try to answer this question.. (6)
Firstly, I want to take a look at [---] (7) law. At the moment it says, if you consume pot or other soft drugs, you are criminal. But are pot smokers really criminal? Fact is that most of them are not, because the only crime [---] (8) they commit, is to buy, own and smoke cannabis. Apart from that they usually are normal citizens like everyone else too (9) . And why should something be illegal when another drug, called alcohol, is legal but much more harmful than pot? No scientific argument justifies (10)this. So we have to find a solution in law to legalize soft drugs like marijuana, the delinquency rate would then (11) decrease and normal people wouldn´t be looked atas criminals. Furthermore a legalization of pot would reduce the black market, and so the number of the criminals, too.(12)
In the second place, the government must support the educational work about these drugs more than now.
Because only if you know enough about them and their potency, you can use these drugs responsibly (13).
So schools (14) should not teach [---] (15) pupils just about the danger of drugs. No, they should explain the differences of soft and hard drugs and the risks of using them. And if more people knew(16) the real facts about drugs, the abuse and addiction of them would decrease.
It should not be a taboo to talk about the consumumption (17)of marijuana in public. And this is the goal which our government should reach: More acceptability of soft drugs in society.
Thirdly, we must find a strategy to evaluate (18) [---] drugs like pot appropriately. Just the profits of [---] (19) taxation should speak for [---] (20) legalization. With this mass of new public money alone (21), the government could finance more and better drug advice centres (22) and the education about drugs at (23)schools. Moreover the profits would relieve (23) the budget of other expenses. By legalizing cannabis the government could control the market. And a controlled market protects the consumers from bad quality, price arbitrariness and from being criminal. It is just important that the assessment is not too high, because this would force the consumers to buy at the black market again. And then a legalization would not bring a change anyway.
Finally, I come to the conclusion that the legalization of soft drugs like marijuana would be appreciated by (24) our society. Because in my opinion it has only good aspects and in the end, everybody has to decide for his own if and how many (25) drugs he consumes. For that reason I hope that the people will understand the inequity in the drug topic someday. But only the future will show whether politicians and citizens will decide to legalize pot or whether the senseless law enforcement (?26)of normal people will continue.