[Englisch Korrektur] A day in London

Hallo,
ich muss als Hausaufgabe einen Text über das Thema "Ein Tag in Londen" schreiben.
Da ich nicht der beste in Englisch bin, wollte ich es erst hier schreiben und dachte ihr könntet es mal korrigieren.

Vorinfo:
Man besucht sein Brieffreund in London und der Vater, des Brieffreundes, sollte ihn abholen. Aber der Vater schaffte es nicht. Der Vater schafft erst um 20 Unr benachrichtigte mich mein Brieffreund über einen Message.


Los:
After the message, I visited many sights. E.g. Big Ben, Tower Bridge, Buckingham Palace and Madame Tussaud`s. I like Madame Tussaud`s.
That is an interesting place. There many well-known people can be seen as wax figures.
To the entire round running about made ​​me hungry.
I went into a fast food restaurant to eat something. I had a hamburger and a cola.
On the street I met Kandi. Kandi is 19 and visited the London`s King School. She is a nice girl.
We walked together in the park. We talked about everything.
It was 7 o´clock in the evening and Kandi must went home.
She gave me her number so that we can point to meet other times.
My pen-friend send a message with that her father was comming to pick me up.
I had a very good time in London and I felt very good


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DANKE