Romeo und Julia-Korrektur

Hallo Leute,
ich habe eine Englisch Hausaufgabe auf, in der ich eine Szene 0 erstellen soll.

Dies habe ich gemacht und den Text übersetzt, doch da sind sicherlich fehler drin, die verbessert werden müssen.

Ich wäre euch wirklich dankbar, wenn ihr es korrigieren könntet :)

Der Text :

It is 15 o`clock in the afternoon.
Montague family moves into the club house of the city of Verona for a cup of coffee and cake to eat. Also, the Capulet family is present there.
Both families are enemies, but the children of this families love each other.
Almost everyone in town knows of this love. Almost all are talking about Romeo and Juliet. Romeo, who loves Juliet very much, is ready to doing everything for her. But Julia tried to show him firstly the cold shoulder. But her feelings will change nothing because she also loves him. Benvolio, the cousin of Romeo tried to identify between the two. He plays the postman. He gives Julia the letters which Romeo writes for her. He arranged meetings with each other. Benvolio is trying with all its forces both love to help. The residents of the town even talk about it. People talk in the clubhouse about it as the family Montague occurs. The Capulet family gets with what the present people say. Both families are faced with great hatred in the eyes. Both families begin to provoke. Trouble in the club house occurs. Neither Romeo, yet Juliet may still something to change what`s happening. Two children of warring families love each other. Will it be love, which will win? Or, the hatred of the families who will love conquer?

DANKE!