Aufsatz Englisch^^

Ich muss so ein Aufsatz über das Fahren mit 16 schreiben. es ist so ähnlich wie eine Eörrterung. Ich wollte mal fragen ob ihr nach fehlern schauen könnt usw. und nach tipps. Schaut bitte ob Einleitung und hauptteil und eigene meinung drin ist.



Driving at 16

In my opinion I explain the problem about Driving at 16.
I think driving at 16 is early. People who drive at 16 arent enough serious. They think when they can drive they drive however and wherever they want.


At first I tell you some positiv arguments.
I would say people who live out from town could take their car and drive into town. For example, my friend live in the country. His father takes him to school every day. But when he is 16 its good for him to use a car.
People who drive a lot need a car too. They travel a lot of to other towns. For example, some pupils in m class only takes motor bikes because they arent old enough to drive with a car.

There are negative things too.
Many guys dont respect the dangerous of driving. They go to party and drink alcohol and then they drive with a car an get an accident. In Germany a lot of people were killed because of driving with alcohol. The statistics of dead driver is very high.
People who are 16 want to drive on freeways. I think its dangerous. They feel free when they can drive so fast and sometimes they phoning and dont look for other drivers.

At least i would say that Driving at 16 isnt good. Its to dangerous because many people drive without responsibleness opposite the other people.


Ich habe viele wortwdh. vllt könnt ihr mir da noch tipps geben. Ist das sinn und gemäß zu verstehen? ich hoffe ein bisschen =((

danke für eure hilfe