English essay (bitte um Verbesserung satzbau und Grammatik)

Argument zu der Frage: Is free time really free? (Bild)

One important fact is that people today have more and more problems like stress or burnout.

In a world where it seems as though the pressure to perform is always on, mostly people are stressed out.
When you have a high volume of stress over a long period of time you might be exhausted and, therefore, burnout. This can affect well-being and quality of life in various ways. For example a loss of pleasure in activities that used to be pleasurable. Furthermore you might get health issues.

The given photo shows that when you have leisure time, you aren’t really free. You have so many appointments and procurements in one day. Thus you must organize your daily routines and errands to put into a place system that will foster your well-being. It’s indispensable to unwind and indulge yourself! For example do yoga to find your inner peace.