Kommentar auf Englisch korrigieren

Ich habe einem Kommentar auf Englisch geschrieben. Ich muss ihn Morgen abgeben ohne Fehler. Ich würde mich sehr freuen wenn es sich jemand angucken könnte und mir sagt wo ich vielleicht einen Fehler übsehen habe, bitte. Das wichtigste ist das ich keinen grammatik Fehler gemacht habe. Danke schon mal im vorraus.


The discussion about the space tourist destination becomes very popular, as there are more and more people want to explore new planets. In the following comment I will discuss whether you should travel into space or not. There are many arguments for travel into space but again also many against it. The first counter argument not to travel into space is the price. Normal people can`t afford to fly there, it`s just too expensive. That means only really rich people can afford to travel there, the others have no chance. An argument for travel into space is the exciting experience that you will have there and that you have an unfogettable memory that you can tell your grandchildren one day. On the other hand the journey into space is very dangerous, a mistake and you can die. Nobody can promise you, that you will come back to earth alive or that you`ll ever see your family again. Besides, you can`t survive in space for long there is no oxygen in the athmosphere of other planets, you have to wear a space suit which is pretty annoying after a while. When you get sick there you haven`t food and medicine. There are radiations that horm people. This habitat doesn`t fit the people, it`s not created for us. Finally, we can say that it`s not a good idea to travel into space and that`s very dangerous for people to leave their habitat. The journey to space should rather remain just a unfulfilled dream.