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Hallo,
ich sollte ein Essay schreiben über das Thema pro/contra Fersehen.
Grammatikalisch bin ich nicht so gut in Englisch habe es jetzt versucht.
Es wäre sehr nett wenn einer sich das Essay anschauen könnte und mit Tipps zur Grammatik gibt.
Das Problem ist das ich in Lückentexte sehr gut bin also wenn man einzelne Wörter grammatikalisch Korrekt umformen muss. Doch beim freien Schreiben mache ich sehr viele Fehler. Gibt es da Tricks beim freien Schreiben wie man da vorgeht.

Pro and Con to watch TV
Television is inherent part of a normal household. Most familys watchs Television at the evening.
Many people think Televison watching is unhealthy .N evertheless is Television the most popular medium world wide.The first moon-landing has the most viewers on the Television.This essay aims to show the pro and con arguments .

The home life is endangered because the family less communicated. Important conversations take shorter.
Televison watching is unhealthy because the users move less and eating more.
The recreation is passive not active.
Some news shows are very manipulative.
The massive violence in some blockbuster is for children not good.

The informations scope is diverts and better.
Documentations are better illustrative for the user the learning effect is better than a book.
Live views are possible the user is middle of the action.
Television watching is relaxation for everyday life.

We can say in summary tv watching is in case of improper consumption risky.
The negative arguments for watch Televison is entitled. The threat to long sit for the Televsion and children look violence movies.The parents must monitor what the children watches on the TV.
Alternative to television is over web stream (Netflix) watch videos and series this had a better monitor function for children. The last problem is the motion shortage, per day to view two hours TV every day. Before watch TV makes sport or go walk.

I`m of the opinion that the usefulness or the harmfulness depends on the behavior of individuals.
the responsibility for healthy tv watch lies with the parents or in a self.

Danke :)

MFG