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Creation story
This is a story about the creation of mankind (humans). The humans origniate from the monkeys. In seven days the monkeys devolped to be humans. On the first day,
the clouds gave the monkeys a brain to think. On the second day the wind gave the monkeys a voice to talk. On the third day the monkeys lost their pelt because of sunburn. On the forth day, the moon gave the monkeys good eyes so they can see better. On the fifth day the star gave the monkeys emotions to love. On the sixth day the monkeys were hit by lightning to be able to go upright and stand like a human. On the seventh day the body changed to be human.


-- Für welche Klasse ist das? --
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Das sollte für die oberstufe 11. Klasse sein.
Entspricht der text für die 11. Klasse. Falls nein bitte ich, um Verbesserung bzw. Tipps

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