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In fact, we want to get best quality at the lowest prices.
Industrial countries like the USA and countries from Europe invest their capital in poor countries which are in the process of developing.
The industrial countries let build factories and make new workstations in the poor countries.
For example in China or South Korea the foreign companies produce different goods and sell them worldwide. On this way the industrial countries and the poor countries have advantages.
The industrial country for example USA can use the other country like China as a consumer for their products and save very much money because in China the workers are not expensive. People in some developing countries will be a victim of exploitation due to lower wage rates and hard work. When we see( or view?) the foxxcom company in China who build Smartphones like iPhones we can take out from newspapers or tv report’s that workers work for low wages(or they payed badly?) and they being fired without any severance payment. The workers have bad working conditions.
The most companies don’t care for the problems caused by them and they feel responsibility. On the other hand, the globalization is good for our quality of life because we can buy things from other countries cheaper or things that can only produced in other countries like oil, technology products like TV’S, Mobile Phones, tropical fruits and vegetables. The effect of this is that we save a lot of money because we can buy those things from poorer countries. Globalization creates new jobs and gives the region an economic upswing. Another advantage is that export jobs often pay more than other jobs.


In my opinion globalization has more advantages than disadvantages for me, but not for our country. We can buy goods cheaper but without jobs we haven`t enough money to buy these cheaper goods. The unemployment rate increases and more and more families in industrialized countries get poorer. It’s not easy as a teenager in Germany to get an education agency where we get much money after education. I cannot imagine my world without globalization. I grew up with products from other countries, like my clothes or my PC. My PC is built in South Korea. I learned and learn a lot with my PC for school or other things like chat with friends, listen to music and I am evolving myself day by day. I read news in the Internet. Many companies cannot exist without the globalization.