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Analyzing the structure of the presented article I am going to describe the objectivity of the author`s perception in relation to the question to what extend he succeeds (what?).
The presented article " ......" deals with the expansion of the Heathrow`s airport and consists of two parts. The first part running from line 1 up to line 16 forms the introduction of the article where the main topic is presented. In this passage the reader is informed about the opening of the "new Terminal 5" (l.2) and about the government`s intention to "maintain its status as one of the world`s most important transport hubs" (l.3). In addition the author speculates about the future by estimating that the "passenger numbers" (l.9) will be doubled "to 122 million a year with a sixth terminal and a third runway" (l.9).
The main part of the article consisting of different quotations comprises the lines 8-38 and can be (sub)divided into two (sub)sections: The first one begins in line 8 and ends in line 24 and deals with the negative consequences of the Heathrow`s airport expansion: It is said that there will be "more flights, more emissions and more climate change" (l.20). The other part runs from line 25 up to line 38 and deals with the positive aspects of the new Terminal 5. Attracting many "business groups" (l.25) the "growing airports are vital to help maintain Britain`s economic competitiveness" (l.26). Furthermore it facilitates the decrease of the pressure experienced in Heathrow and improves the tourist experiences (cf. ll. 33)

With regard to the objectivity of the author`s perception one can say that he presents facts and information without trying to convince the reader to have a certain opinion. Because of the use of many quotations (ll. 17-38) the reader is not able to find out the author`s personal opinion. He only tries to provide his readers with information and does not draw a conclusion. This has the effect that the reader thinks critically about the topic and has to form his own opinion. It could be assumed that the author tries to underline the positive respectively the negative aspects of the expansion or that he tries to influence the reader by the choice of words but if these aspects are analyzed one can find out that the perception is objective. Indeed he uses words like "protests" (l.8), "vociferous opposition" (l. 10), (climate change), or "demolish" (l.13), which suggest negative associations, but he has to describe the situation very detailed so that the reader can comprehend the problems resulting from the expansion.
To sum up one can say that it is the frequent use of quotations giving (gerund ist hier falsch) the text the movement (bewegung?) in contrast to other forms of texts, where the author tries to convince the reader with expressing his own opinion or with manipulating the reader`s subconscious. (ein satz in 3 zeilen: missverständlich, kompliziert, gekünstelt, gerund falsch verwendet. geht`s einfacher?)