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Hallo :) ich mache das hier zum ersten Mal und aber ich hätte da ein paar Sachen:


Mary tells me that my father won`t be back before the 17th.The words are for like a slap in may face.I mean he is may father and he doesn`t want to see me? He is not curious to see?Somethimes I thought that he`s embarrassed for me and that`s the reason why I am often so sad.After this message Mary suggest me that I`ll drive by coach to visit her brother in Adelaide, south of Australian, and meet her nephew Kevin.When I was there I was so relived, because the whole family is very nice to me.I was blissful.And as Kevin explaines me that we are going to go to Kangarro Islandon the next day, I don`t know what I should to say.I was so excited and ecstatic than words can say.

ich machs auch zum ersten mal ;)
Mary told me that my father won`t be back before the 17th.The words were like a slap into my face.I mean he`s my father and he doesn`t want to see me? Is he not curious to see? Sometimes I think that he`s embarrassed about me and that`s why I am sad quite often. After this message Mary suggested that I should visit her brother by bus in Adelaide, south of Australia, and meet her nephew Kevin. When I got there I was so relieved, because the whole family was very nice to me.I was happy when Kevin told me that we are going to go to Kangarro Island on the next day, I don`t know what I should say.I was so excited and ecstatic that words couln`t tell.

Okay, ich weiß ist jetzt schon ziemlich anders, aber so würde ich es halt schreiben :)

Zitat:
Mary told me that my father wouldn`t be back before the 17th.The words were like a slap into my face.I mean he`s my father and he doesn`t want to see me? Is he not curious to see? Sometimes I think that he`s embarrassed about me and that`s why I am sad quite often. After this message Mary suggested that I should visit her brother by bus in Adelaide, in the south of Australia, and meet her nephew Kevin. When I got there I was so relieved, because the whole family was very nice to me. I was happy when Kevin told me that we were going to go to Kangaroo Island [--] the next day, I didn`t know [--] what to say. I was so excited and ecstatic that words couldn`t tell.

Ich habe noch etwas an NZkiwis guter Korrektur rumgeb astelt.
fett = korrigiert/eingefügt; [---] = gestrichen