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ich bräuchte eine korrektur bis morgen wäre nett. :)


The following text is going to be a comment on the question whether all private firearms should be banned.

First of all, I think that the U.S.A. have some of the most dangerous places on earth. If the police can`t handle to prevent criminals from doing murders so why shouldn`t the inhabitants protect themselves? The police get payed on a minimum level and nobody would risk his life under this circumstance. The U.S. population has a problem with the low security standart and take the safety of their childs and family in their own hands.

In contrast to this, is the fact that weapon holders mostly can´t think about the consequences of a homestored gun. The risk to get killed by a gun increase dramatically if your`e the owner of one. It is also fact that the most killed persons by gunusage are the results of accidents with private firearms. In addition to that we cant forget that the parents of all mass murders at school shootings where weapon owners.

Finally i come to the conclusion that a gun can in some cases protect your life but getting killed by your own weapon is a higher risk which definitely cant be taken.
Frage von MajekPL (ehem. Mitglied) | am 24.02.2011 - 18:58

 
Antwort von GAST | 24.02.2011 - 20:16
Zitat:
First of all, I think that you`ll find some of the most dangerous places on earth in the USA. If the police can`t handle to prevent criminals from committing murders so why shouldn`t the inhabitants protect themselves? The police get payed on a minimum level and none of them will risk his life under these circumstances. The U.S.
population has a problem with the low security standard and so people take the safety of their children and families into their own hands.

In contrast to this, it is the fact that the owners of weapons mostly can´t think of / imagine / keep in mind the consequences of homestored guns. The risk to get killed by a gun will increase dramatically if you are the owner of one. It is also a fact that most of the persons killed by the use of a gun are the victims of accidents with private firearms. In addition to that we can`t forget that the parents of all mass murderers at school shootings wereweapon owners.

Finally I come to the conclusion that a gun in some cases can protect your life but getting killed by your own weapon is a higher risk which definitely can`t be taken.


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Antwort von MajekPL (ehem. Mitglied) | 24.02.2011 - 21:43
vielen, vielen, vielen dank :)

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