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Englisch, bitte um Grammatikalische verbesserung,vielen dank

Frage: Englisch, bitte um Grammatikalische verbesserung,vielen dank
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…Also ..und zwar is das so ne Art Bildergeschichte könnt ihr mir helfen grammatikalisch noch alles korrekt zu gestalten? Wäre wirklich sehr toll. dankee schon mal dafür^^


..also hier der Satz en ich weiterführen sollte:

The Carletons spent their last summer holidays in Africa. One day the went to a stree market…

So jetzt meine weiterführung…

..After they walked the long street market along.
Tim has found a little shop..in this shop he saw a pullover it was his favourite ´cause he saw it at home too..he wanted to buy it, but the problem was that this pullover cost 40 dollar !..That was to much money..because he has some 20dollar pocket money.
Here the pullover cost some 15 Dollar. So he bought it of course
..A month later he shows his cool Pullover in the class.
The classmates were envious of his pullover.
After the school he take off his pullover and washed it in the washmaschine (hier glaube ich stimmt was nich..XD)
In the evening he wants to wear his pullover..but than…he was shocked! “What is happening with my pullover?”..the pullover was suddenly very small..he was very disappear that his favourite pullover is too small to wear it now..so he gift (schenkte) the pullover his sister, she used it for her barbies..
Frage von NikolaPeach (ehem. Mitglied) | am 16.03.2010 - 18:30


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Antwort von NikolaPeach (ehem. Mitglied) | 17.03.2010 - 07:10
danke
für die HILFE, bin sehr begeistert !


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Antwort von RichardLancelot | 17.03.2010 - 08:49
Zitat:
One day the went to a stree market…
Sollte sicherlich "they went" heißen, oder?
Zitat:
After they walked the long street market along. Tim has found a little shop.
After they walked along the..., Tim has found...
Zitat:
in this shop he saw a pullover it was his favourite ´cause he saw it at home too
Kannst du diesen Satz bitte mal in Deutsch posten?
Zitat:
he wanted to buy it, but the problem was that this pullover cost 40 dollar !
Den Teil "the problem was that" würde ich weg lassen...
Zitat:
because he has some 20dollar pocket money.
Hier würde ich "some" durch "just" ersetzen.

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