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Ist der Text in Gutem Englisch geschrieben?

Frage: Ist der Text in Gutem Englisch geschrieben?
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hi,
hab so meine Probleme mit Englisch.
Ich bin mir nicht ganz sicher ob der Text in einem einwandfreien Englisch geschrieben ist.

Würde nämlich gerne eine 1 dafür bekommen.
Würd mich sehr darüber freuen wenn sich jmd den Text durchlesen und ihn anschließend korrigieren oder mir tipps geben könnte. Bräuchte so schnell wie möglich hilfe

THX im Vorraus
about the D-day
On the 6th June 1944 the biggest invasion from sea found Instead of. The D-Day (codename Operation Overlord) began after nearly 2 years planning and exercises. To make the life easier for the landing troops, paratroopers spring at the night of 5th June 1944 behind the German defence lines (Airborne)BILD to find and destroy important military and tactical position like railway lines BILD, tactical villages BILD or heavy artillery positions BILD, But there where many problems in that night. An example is that many paratroopers unities landed about 40 kilometres from there real application place. AT the early morning at the 6th June were all aims reached and so they make the life easier for the landing troops on the beach . But the price for that job was terrible over 2000 paratroopers died many of them by landing. At the morning of the 6 June 1944 More than 5000 ships (battleships destroyer, light cruisers, heavy cruisers and landing crafts) and nearly 9000 airplanes took part at the invasion. 5000 of them were bomber! At 5 o clock the invasion fleet which comes from England achieved by their application areas, the French mainland and smoked artificial fog. Just over 250,000 men took part at this invasion .At 6:00 o`clock as nearly 5000 heavy bombers of type Boeing B17 BILD trough her bombs against the German positions. The German Positions were called WN `s BILD (pockets of resistance). But much of the bombs and grenades don’t hit their target. The reason was that the coordinates ordered back because they don’t want to hit their own man and their fleet. The other reason was the foggy and bad wheater and the many clothes which are on sky. After this heavy attack the allies think that all WN`s were destroy and that there aren’t any resistance but that false. But many of german attitudes not even hurt. Especially in the section Omaha beach the shells and bomb missed their effect.
Most of them explode somewhere in the French landscape. BILD At 6:30 the biggest invasions begin. The artificial fog patches began to ventilate and the German saw the probably biggest invasion fleet of the history. Because the landing segment was divided very largely the landing zone get in 5 segments GOLD; JUNO; UTAH, Sword and Omaha At the segments Utah, Sword, Juno, and Gold the resistance were small. All Wn`s conquered fast by the allied infantry. But at Omaha beach, begin at 6:30 the hell on earth. The reason was that many German defence attitudes survive the bombardments.
It lasted completely the day to conquer all the German WN`s in Omaha. Particularly at WN 62 BILD the allies has the biggest lose which were in Omaha Beach. Because of the heavy losses of the allied infantry the soldiers call the landing this segment bloody Omaha. More than 3000 men lost there lives. At WN 62 the soldier Hein Severloh fights against the allies infantry with his MG42 and his Karabiner K98.BILD He shot total 12.500 shells as well and with his karabiner over 500. After the war he wrote a book about his experience in the Second World War BUCH. At the evening/ night the Germans defender had to withdraw because the Amies want to encircle them. At the end of this day the Americans control all German WNs.
However, the losses were terribly the Allies lost over 4000 soldiers The German Wehrmacht lost about 2000 Soldiers BILD, 4000 are missing. The most of them get in the allied captivity. So also the Soldier Hein Severloh. Today a memorial remind and a cemetery with buried German and Allies Soldiers who died in the bloody battle by Omaha beach BILDER. A good film who present the hell of Omaha is the film saving private Ryan or in german Der Soldat James Ryan
GAST stellte diese Frage am 24.11.2009 - 18:53


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Antwort von algieba (ehem. Mitglied) | 24.11.2009 - 19:56
About the D-day
On the 6th June 1944 the biggest invasion from sea found Instead of[ Was meinst du damit? instead of heißt anstatt/anstelle von]. The D-Day (codename Operation Overlord) began after nearly 2 years of planning and exercises. To make life easier for the landing troops,
paratroopers sprang behind the German defence lines (Airborne)BILD in the night of 5th June 1944 to find and destroy important military and tactical positions like the railway lines BILD, tactical villages BILD or heavy artillery positions BILD. But there occurred many problems during that night. An example is that many paratrooper unities landed about 40 kilometres from there at a real application place. In the early morning of the 6th June all aims were reached and so they made the task easier for the landing troops at the beach. But the price for that job was terrible: Over 2000 paratroopers died, many of them by landing. In the morning of the 6 June 1944 more than 5000 ships (battleship destroyers, light cruisers, heavy cruisers and landing crafts) and nearly 9000 airplanes took part in the invasion. 5000 of them were bombers! At 5 o`clock the invasion fleet, which came from England, reached their application areas, the French mainland and smoked artificial fog. Just over 250,000 men took part in this invasion. At 6 o`clock, as nearly 5000 heavy bombers of the type Boeing B17 BILD dropped bombs on the German positions. The German positions were called WNs [Plural nicht mit Apostroph] BILD (pockets of resistance). But many [Bomben kannste zählen] of the bombs and grenades did not hit their target. The reason was that the coordinates ordered back because they didn`t want to hit their own men [waren ja wohl mehr als einer] and their fleet. The other reason was the foggy and bad weather and the many clothes which were in sky. After this heavy attack the allies thought that all WN`s were destroyed and that there was no resistance anymore. But that turned out to be false. Many of German attitudes [? attitude heißt Meinung/Haltung] not even hurt. Especially in the section Omaha beach the shells and bomb had missed their effect.
Most of them exploded somewhere in the French landscape. BILD At 6:30 the biggest invasions began. The artificial fog patches started to ventilate and the Germans saw the probably biggest invasion fleet in the history. Because the landing segment was divided very largely, the landing zone got 5 segments: GOLD; JUNO; UTAH, Sword and Omaha. At the segments Utah, Sword, Juno, and Gold the resistance were small. All Wns were conquered fastly by the allied infantry. But at Omaha beach, at 6:30 they found the hell on earth. The reason was that many German defence attitudes survived the bombardments.
It lasted completely the whole day to conquer all the German WNs in Omaha. Particularly at WN 62 BILD the allies had the biggest losses at Omaha Beach. Because of the heavy losses of the allied infantry, the soldiers call the landing at this segment bloody Omaha. More than 3000 men lost there lives. At WN 62 the soldier Hein Severloh fought against the allied infantry with his MG42 and his Karabiner K98.BILD He shot 12.500 shells in total and with his karabiner over 500. After the war he wrote a book about his experiences in the Second World War BUCH. In the evening/ night the German defenders had to withdraw because the Amies wanted to encircle them. At the end of this day, the Americans controlled all German WNs.
However, the losses were terribly. The Allies lost more than 4000 soldiers. The German Wehrmacht lost about 2000 soldiers BILD, 4000 were missing. Most of them got in the allied captivity. So did also soldier Hein Severloh. Today a memorial and a cemetery with buried German and allied soldiers who died in the bloody battle by Omaha beach BILDER remind of the invasion and its consequences. A good film which [ist keine Person] presents [he, she, it, das -s muss mit xD] the hell of Omaha is the film "Saving Private Ryan" or in German "Der Soldat James Ryan".

Du musst dir klar werden, welche Erzählzeit du verwenden willst, ich habe erstmal, soweit ich es gesehen habe, alles in die Vergangenheit gesetzt.
Was du mit den attitudes sagen willst, habe ich nicht verstanden.
Ansonsten: viel Text. Bin jetzt nur einmal drübergflogen und habe bestimmt nicht alles gefunden.


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Antwort von algieba (ehem. Mitglied) | 24.11.2009 - 20:06
It took completely the whole day to conquer all the German WNs in Omaha.

 
Antwort von GAST | 24.11.2009 - 20:14
LOL WO isn der andre Kommi hin?!?!?!?!?!?!?!


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Antwort von algieba (ehem. Mitglied) | 24.11.2009 - 20:28
About the D-day
On the 6th June 1944 the biggest invasion from sea found Instead of[ Was meinst du damit? instead of heißt anstatt/anstelle von]. The D-Day (codename Operation Overlord) began after nearly 2 years of planning and exercises. To make it easier for the landing troops, paratroopers sprang behind the German defence lines (Airborne)BILD in the night of 5th June 1944 to find and destroy important military and tactical positions like the railway lines BILD, tactical villages BILD or heavy artillery positions BILD. But there occurred many problems during that night. An example is that many paratrooper unities landed about 40 kilometres from there at a real application place. In the early morning of the 6th June all aims were reached and so they made the task easier for the landing troops at the beach. But the price for thIS job was terrible: Over 2000 paratroopers died, many of them DURING THE ACT OF landing. In the morning of the 6 June 1944 more than 5000 ships (battleship destroyers, light cruisers, heavy cruisers and landing crafts) and nearly 9000 airplanes took part in the invasion. 5000 of them were bombers! At 5 o`clock the invasion fleet, which came from England, reached their application areas, the French mainland and smoked artificial fog. Just over 250,000 men took part in this invasion. At 6 o`clock, nearly 5000 heavy bombers of the type Boeing B17 BILD dropped bombs on the German positions. The German positions were called WNs [Plural nicht mit Apostroph] BILD (pockets of resistance). But many [Bomben kannste zählen] of the bombs and grenades did not hit their target. ONE reason was that the coordinates ordered back because they didn`t want to hit their own men [waren ja wohl mehr als einer] and their fleet. The other reason was the foggy and bad weather and the many clothes which were in sky. After this heavy attack, the allies thought that all WN`s were destroyed and that there was no resistance anymore. But that turned out to be false. Many of THE German attitudes [? attitude heißt Meinung/Haltung] WERE not even hurt. Especially in the section Omaha beach, the shells and bomb had missed their effect.
Most of them exploded somewhere in the French landscape. BILD At 6:30 the biggest part of the invasions began. The artificial fog patches started to ventilate and the Germans saw the probably LARgest invasion fleet in the history. Because the landing segment was divided very SPACIOUSly [falls weiträumig das ist, was du sagen willst], the landing zone CONSISTED OF 5 segments: GOLD; JUNO; UTAH, Sword and Omaha. IN the segments Utah, Sword, Juno, and Gold the resistance were small. All Wns were conquered fastly by the allied infantry. But at Omaha beach, at 6:30 they found the hell on earth. The reason was that many German defence attitudes survived the bombardments.
It lasted completely the whole day to conquer all the German WNs in Omaha. Particularly at WN 62 BILD the allies had the biggest losses at Omaha Beach. Because of the heavy losses of the allied infantry, the soldiers callED the landing at this segment bloody Omaha. More than 3000 men lost theIr lives. At WN 62 the soldier Hein Severloh fought against the allied infantry with his MG42 and his Karabiner K98.BILD He shot 12.500 shells in total and with his karabiner over 500. After the war he wrote a book about his experiences in the Second World War BUCH. In the evening AND THE night the German defenders had to withdraw because the Amies wanted to encircle them. At the end of this day, the Americans controlled all German WNs.
However, the losses were terriblE. The Allies lost more than 4000 soldiers. The German Wehrmacht lost about 2000 soldiers BILD, 4000 were missing. Most of them WERE TAKEN in allied captivity. So did also THE soldier Hein Severloh. Today a memorial and a cemetery with buried German and allied soldiers who died in the bloody battle by Omaha beach BILDER remind of the invasion and its consequences. A good film which [ist keine Person] presents [he, she, it, das -s muss mit xD] the hell of Omaha is the film "Saving Private Ryan" or in German "Der Soldat James Ryan".

Habe noch ein bisschen was gefunden. Wenn du es gut vorträgst, sollte eine gute Note dabei rausspringen.

 
Antwort von GAST | 24.11.2009 - 20:35
THX
Ach ja weißt du wie man die folgenden Sachen am besten Übersetzt:
Am 6 Juni 1944 fand die größte Invasion von See her statt
und
sie erreichten die französische Küste und nebelten ( künstlicher Nebel)sich ein

thx im vorraus


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Antwort von algieba (ehem. Mitglied) | 24.11.2009 - 20:49
On the 6th June 1944 the biggest invasion from the sea took place.

They reached the French coast and fogged themselves.

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