Englisch Korrektur - Part II

Here we go again. :)


The War of Secession,
also known as the American Civil War, was a military conflict which took place between 1861 and 1885 in North America.
The two sides which were mixed up IN the conflict were on the one hand the soBINDESTRICHcalled ANFÜHRUNGSZEICHEN OBENUnion" (NorthERN States) and on the other hand the ANFÜHRUNGSZEICHEN OBENconfederation".
With nearly 650.000 victims KOMMA the War of Secession was one of the BLOODIEST conflicts IN American history.

"bloodiest" ist schon Superlativ, da ist das "more" über. :)

The South of America lived ON the economy based on plantations; especially cotton wool was aN IN DEMAND resource. In order to fulfil[l] the INCREASED demand, the NICHTS HIER production could just keep UP with the aid of cheap workers, so NICHTS HIER black slaves were used.

Bei "fulfil" musst du dich entscheiden: schreibst du eher British English (dann nur ein L) oder American English (dann zwei L)?

[Im Norden der Vereinigten Staaten dagegen hielt die Industrie ihren Einzug.]

In the Northern States, on the other hand, industry was catching on.

After Abraham Lincoln was elected NICHTS HIER president of America in 1860, the SOUTHERN states THAT WERE STILL HOLDING ON TO SLAVERY knew THE PRACTICE would be abolished. That was the reason why they JOINED A PACT: The Confederate States of America KOMMA consisting of ELEVEN individual American states.

"separating" heißt splitten, du meinst aber zusammengehen. Zahlen bis zwölf schreibt man in Texten immer aus. :)

These RENEGADE [?] states elected Jefferson Davis AS their president. Soon afterWARDS, the War of Secession between the Confederates and the Union began. MOST of the fights took place in northERN A(!)merican states, SUCH AS Tennessee and Virginia.

Mir ist nicht ganz klar, was du meinst, ich glaube du willst bei den 11 Staaten auf "abtrünnig" o.ä. hinaus. "Most" in der Phrase "most of" nie mit "the" davor; "so zum Beispiel" heißt auf Englisch "such as...."; hier nicht "like..." nehmen.

Inhaltlich wie immer alles bestens, wenige Fehler - auch wie immer. :)