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Dear diary,
today I saw Amitabh Bachchan. He is one of the most famous actors in Mumbai. But the story, how I see him is a bit funny and also strange. 
My brother and I want to earn money and so we saw a toilet.
We stood in front of it and wait for people. Suddenly i couldnt hold me and so I went to the toilet.
My brother Salim wait but then I heard a voice. A man gace Salim money because he want to use the toilet. But how? I wasnt finish. 
Salim told me that I have to come out but I cant.The man took his money back and went away. Salim was very angry because this was our chance to earn money. A time later i heard a helicopter. I was surprised. The kids creied " Amiath Bachchan". I was nervous and I tried to open the door. I cant. Salim closed the door and so I cant open it. In the cabinette of the toilet was a hole and so I saw what happened outside. I was so angry with Salim. This was my first chance to see one of the most famous actors.
I couldnt come out. In my pocket i got a picture of Amitabh Bachchan which I found in ftont of a cinema. 5 minutes later i saw a hole in the ground under toilet. The water looked awful and the smell made me sick. But this was my opportunity to get out of here. I took a deep breath, held my nose and jumped into the hole. I was outside and I saw the crowd of kids. All of them looked at me and laughed. I didnt noticed it and went to Amitabh Bachchan. I asked him for a sign on my picture of him. After he signed it I was the happiest boy there. 
But then Salim came to me and took my picture with the sign. He said he would sell it to earn money. I didnt allow it but he did. I was very sad and angry too. This was my day.
Jamal...