Vorstellung auf Englisch - Korrekturlesen

ja dan hab ich selber geschrieben und ich bin auch keine 11 :D

"Since 2009, I have done an apprenticeship at the" ich mach das doch aber noch?! wieso dann have done?

"after my apprenticeship by the _________: Weiß grad nicht, was in der Lücke stehen könnte. Auf jeden Fall bin ich sicher, dass die Präposition by hier falsch ist. Vielleicht kannst du ja mal noch nen Tipp geben, was in die Lücke soll."

da kommt der firmenname rein. und mit at hattest du recht ;)

Hello,

I`d like to introduce myself. My name is ***** and I`m 21 years old.
I was born on the 1st of January 1991 in ****. I`m the only child and I live with my mum and my dad in ****. From 2000 to 2009, I attended the grammar school Neue Nikolaischule, which I finished with the A level. My intensive courses were maths and history, but my favourite subjects were art and physics.

Since 2009, I have done an apprenticeship at the ****** as a mechatronics technician. It has always been my dream to work as a mechatronic technician respectively do an apprenticeship. Meanwhile I´m in the third year of training. During the apprenticeship, we get to know different departments. Currently, I`m in the gas and steam turbine powerhouse at the fitters. There it`s very interesting and the work is physically hard. Sometimes we drive for 1 or 2 weeks to Piesteritz, it`s in the near from Wittenberg, or to Bischofferode, which is located in Thuringia. There are biomass powerhouses. I hope this can be the work after my apprenticeship at the Stadtwerke Leipzig.

Now, I would like to tell you something about my hobbies and interests.
Since 1998, I have played drums in an orchestra. We visited different countries like Italy or China. We played tracks from James Bond, Phil Collins right up to the Phantom of the Opera, Pirates of the Caribbean and so on. Every year, we played in the “Gewandhaus zu Leipzig” in the big hall. We had great fun and it was a great feeling to be on the stage playing with the orchestra and delighting the audience. But since 2 years, I have ceased with the drumming. The Ievel was worse and worse. It just wasn`t any fun anymore. I needed a new occupation. So, I started with athletic sports. By this time, I visit the gym 3 times the week. It`s very hard but it makes a lot of fun and I`m happy. The main is discipline and endurance. But I like biking, hiking and skiing, too. Every week, I drive 100km by my bike. In the holidays, my parents and I often make a journey in order to hiking to Italy or Austria. I love to be outside and enjoy the nature, to travel and to meet new countries, my family and my friends. My friends and I like it to make party in the clubs. We travelling often together. At last, we were at the Stubaital in Austria skiing. Every now and again, I do nothing and look TV or play PC.

Hab das nochmal alles bissel überarbeitet und was hinzugefügt. Vorallem im letzten Abschnitt.
Hat sonst noch jmd eine Idee, was man so über sich sagen könnte :) ?