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hallo leute ich soll ein klausurmäßiges comment zum thema media abgeben und habe mich für das thema internet entschieden, wie findet ihr meinen text und habt ihr villeicht verbesserungsvorschläge oder ideen wie man ihn für eine oberstufe proffesioneller mit worten ausstücken könnte?


Comment (Media: Internet)
The media is everywhere.
Television, the Internet and newspapers are omnipresent in our daily life. Virtually everyone is affected by them. They give us the latest information and help us to form our opinion. Also newspapers have a great responsibility, which raises the question of whether they should disclose all their knowledge to the public eye. We experience the homosexual tendencies of our foreign minister, the marital problems of Brad Pitt and Angelina Jolie and scary reports on murderers, rapists and kidnappers. Is it really necessary for society to learn of all this?

Under this aspect i want to discuss: How does the Internet changes our life?

Nearly 40 years ago the U.S Department of Defense started a project. The goal of this project was to connect all universities and research institutions and create some kind of "network" which could send information in a few seconds from one computer to another. This project was the birth of the "Intranet". From this prototype network our Internet evolved which connect us with more than billions of people. In my opinion the internet is a great opportunity to show the world that we can handle the potency of the free exchange of information’s about everything that could interest someone. Take for example an internet site with integrated chat function where you can meet new people and share your interest with them, like facebook. Here you have the positive facts that you can meet new people while still sitting at home, discuss with them actual thematic´s that fascinate you and arrange meetings where you could pursue the same hobby but i cannot deny that this chat forums also have their negative aspects. The fact is that you can decide free who you want to be on this sites and so it could be that you meet someone who is not the one he claims to be, like a woman which in reality represents a fat man who spends his time alone in his home chatting with strangers and claiming he is the hot woman in his profile picture. Also pedophile might use this pages to meet and arrange dates with underage children which usually cannot notice the difference between a real person and an "Identity thief". In other words you have to take some time to proof if the person you are communicating is really the one he claims to be.
Another significant point is the rapid exchange and free access of information. For example you want to get some information how to write the perfect comment, within a few seconds you get your results. The Internet provides you with information about everything that could come into your mind, cooking recipes? No problem. How to build a house? No problem. The Internet can teach you everything but on the other hand you can also access prohibited material like child pornography or weapon blueprints what is absolutely forbidden and must be closely monitored.
A third I want to discuss the topic of online shopping and online banking. Although its true that this online trading is pleasantly, simple and cheaper than buying regular in supermarkets or going to the bank and the offered selection is impressive it would be wrong to claim that this possibility the Internet is granting us has only advantages. These “network-marketplaces” are infiltrated with hackers and counterfeiters, which are just waiting to steal your bank data or sell faked products to exorbitant prices and which contaminate your whole PC with viruses and malware. Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that the Internet is a magnificient thing but must be enjoyed carefully, you must always pay attention to your actions inside this network and be aware of all the bad things that could happen to you while you "surf on the web".