Comment in English Überprüfung und Verbesserung (Klasse 8)

Hallo wir sollten heut ein Comment in Englisch schreiben. Habe da schon etwas gemacht aber das hört sich nicht so an.

Thema:
Go abroad / in an other country.


Ich bitte um Verbesserungen / Tipps / Änderungen / Vorschläge

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Going in an other COuntry

Nowadays there are many people who want to go abroad in an other country.
They want to start a new life and get a new chance.
But not everything of immigration is very good. You really have to immigrate
yourself, that means you have to make friends, Ügo in society and find a new job,
otherwise you´ll get lost. In addition you have to learn the new language. So you
have much things to do when you´re going abroad. You lost your friends and maybe get
seperated from your family, when they don´t want to come with. So I think it´s probably
not worth doing all these consuming things.