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Are we initiating the end of the world when it comes to our behavior towards global warming or do scientists exaggerate? Write a comment!

Today global warming is the top issue of our time. Every country tries to do something against global warming for example they reduce CO2 emissions. But not every human want to do or don’t know how to do something against this process.
Take a look at the possibilities of renewable energies. It cost a lot of money and is not as efficient as fossil energies are. That’s the reason why most of countries cannot or won’t to do anything against global warming. Another cause of doing nothing against it is the slightly clarification for the people who don’t know what will happen in future with our planet.
They don’t know what they can do against global warming.
Furthermore there are too few renewable energy stations that they can be high efficiently. Each individual thinks that an individual cannot change something, and therefore don’t act against it, How are we going to do this alone?
The industry still works with fossil energies because it brings more profit, renewable energies actually restrict the consumption and that means less money. They still think conventionally, maybe they have fear towards a change or new things.
But to turn the tables what is all right what experts are saying about global warming?
It is proven that gas emissions are dangerous for the environment and that the polar caps are still melting and we feel that the weather has change in deeper and higher temperatures and bigger storms. They told us when we reduce the greenhouse gas emissions the weather becomes better. An example for that is
They make us afraid with their predictions that in few years the world will change completely. But why the head of states don’t do so much against this process? Either they don’t want or the experts exaggerate and the head of states know this. Many unanswered questions which a normal citizen can not answer.

I come to the conclusion:
It`s up to our behavior, what will happen in future: Either we can participate in change or we do nothing, and in this way it comes worse.
If we change nothing, the earth does, but not in our favor.
So, stand up and be ecofriendly, because the first is the winner.

Danke fürs korrigieren :)
ANONYM stellte diese Frage am 09.03.2011 - 16:47


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Antwort von nostalgie | 12.03.2011 - 22:05
z.1 Nowadays "global warming" is a topic that is dealt a lot with

z.1-2 Every country tries to prevent global warming by for example reducing CO2 emissions.

z.2-3 But not every human wants to do or knows how to do something against this process.

z.4 It costs a lot of money.

z.5 That’s the reason why most of the countries

z.6-8 Another prospect of people`s silence,
is their unawareness of the future disasters.

z.10-11 Furthermore there are too few renewable energy stations that could be high efficient.

z.14 restrict the consumption, which means less money.

z.15 maybe they fear changes or new interventions.

z.16 is it really accurate what experts apply?

z.18-19 we feel that the weather constantly changes (lass bigger storms weg)

z.20 the weather improves

z.20-23 An example for that is trying to make us realize the importance of a change by predicting, that the world will be changed completely, if we remain motionless.

z.23-26 But why doesn`t state do anything against the it. It`s either they are not willing to help or they obviously think that the experts are exaggerating the situation. Many questions remain unanswered to an ordinary citizen.

z.27-29 I have come to the conclusion that the future depends on our behavior towards the nature. It`s either we do something against it or stay hands folded.

 
Antwort von GAST | 13.03.2011 - 11:45
z.1 Nowadays "global warming" is a topic that is dealt with a lot

z.1-2 Every country tries to prevent global warming by, for example, reducing CO2 emissions.

z.4 They cost a lot of money, and are not as ...

z.5 That’s the reason why most of the countries

z.6-8 Another prospect of people`s silence, is their unawareness of [---] future disasters.

Zitat:
Another cause for doing nothing against it is the little knowledgepeople have who don’t know what will happen with our planet in future.

z.10-11 Furthermore there are not enough renewable energy stations that could be highlyefficient.

Zitat:
Each individual thinks that he/she cannot change anything, and therefore dooen’t act against it,


Zitat:
[---]Industry still works with fossil energies because of its higher profit.,


z.14 restrict [---]consumption, which means less money.

z.15 maybe they fear changes or new interventions.


Ich habe noch einige Fehlerchen in Nostalies Text korrigiert - sowie Fehler im Original (sind durch "Zitat" gekennzeichnet, die N. übersah.
Wenn ich zeit habe bearbeite ich vielleicht noch den Schlussteil.

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