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Dear Sir/Madame

I saw the letter from Paul Harris in the “Youth-Magazine“and I would like to talk with you about diet.

Paul’s diet isn’t healthy and he could be adiposity after a while. He doesn’t drink enough water and too much coke. His food is most of the time fried and not fresh and natural. Paul eats great quantities and that is not good for his body.
I think fried food is yummy, but I don’t eat it every day. My mother has always cooked healthy food and it’s not from the can. She doesn’t like fast food, but I’m allowed to eat it.
I often miss the breakfast and eat the unhealthy food from the school. I don’t think that is good for my body, but haven’t enough time to have a breakfast. Maybe I should get up earlier.
I think I should eat more vegetable and less meat. In biology I write about adipositas. Since then I try to eat more healthy meal.

Thank you for your attention and I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully

Dankeschön :D