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Ja stimmt, old_but_alert1 wahrscheinlich hast du Recht und es haben sich viel zu viele Fehler eingeschlichen... Die Informationen hatte ich aber aus einem Buch.Und es soll ja nur eine kleine Zusammenfassung der Geschichte sein.Ich habe es nochmal überarbeitet, und es wäre sehr nett wenn du nochmal drüberschaust.

In the course of British history there were much immigrations to Britain.Firstly, even 250 until 1066 Celtic,Romans,Angles Saxons,Jutes,Frisians,Franks and Normans arrived and formed the first communities in the British Isles.Some other ethnic groups like Jews or Lombards from Italy also migrated to great Britain.
In the 16 th century Huguenots, protestants from France arrived to Britain.Then followed Jews and Irish.
After the second world war mainly immigrants from the British colonial terretories- the so called New Commonwealth migrated to Britain.
They work very hard in dirty circumstances.
But a serious problem represented immigrants from west indies and Africa.A big role for problems played their Language,religion,scin colour, economic contribution and the strangeness. Ethnic groups have fled because they were distributed from their own countries and also they wanted to reach a higher living standard.

todays situation:
The immigrants influenced the British lifestyle and also the society.Some of them had the knowledge, which the British didn´t or hardly had.For example the building of weapons and production of clock.Also they brought with them new kinds of clothes,meals,religions, traditions and so on.The Asian had the most influence to Britain and contribute to economic process.

Foreigner arrive to Britain to get a better life there.Only they can reach that if they have a good job and earn money.For example in London one in two people registred as homeless are from ethnic minorities.The unemployment of other colored immgrants is higher because they don´t have good education.But the Unemployment of Indian British is not so high and almost the same as the British indigenous.The teenager of every ethnic group mostly don´t have a job.A long time ago there was a extreme form of racial harassment at work and discrimination against foreigner.today they are acting against discrimination but always race riots.

hmm na ich wollte ja noch kurz berichten was fürn einfluss die haben,ist das nicht richtig wenn ich dann im past bleibe?

ich muss es bis dienstag fertig haben :(

Danke.

Zitat:
In the 16 th century Huguenots, Protestants from France arrived in Britain.

They were followed by Jews and Irishmen.
After the Second World War mainly immigrants from the British colonial territories- the so called New
Commonwealth - migrated to Britain.
They had to work very hard under disagreeable circumstances.
But immigrants from the West Indies and Africa represented a serious problem because of their Languages ,religions, scin colour, economic contribution and their strangeness. These ethnic groups left their home countries because they were either expelled from their own countries or they wanted to reach a higher living standard.

Zitat:
todays situation:
The immigrants have influenced [---} British lifestyle and [---] society. Some of them had [---] knowledge, which the British didn´t [---] have. [--ganzer Satz gestrichen -nonsense - ]. They also brought with them new kinds of clothes, meals, religions and traditions. [--1--]. Asians have had most of the influence on Britain and have contributed to the economic process.
Foreigners arrive in Britain to get a better life there. They can only reach that if they have good jobs and earn money. For example, one in two people in London registered as homeless are from ethnic minorities. The unemployment of other coloured immgrants is higher because they haven`t had a good education. But the unemployment of Indian British people is not that high and almost the same as the one of Britains themselves. .The teenagers of every ethnic group mostly don´t have jobs. Some time ago an extreme form of racial harassment and discriminations against foreigners were to be observed all over the country.

Today they are acting against discrimination but always race riots. (2)

[--1--] schreibe/sage nie und nimmer "and so on" in Referat oder Prüfung, das ist "Vortäuschung falscher Tatsachen" wenn du was weißt, schreibe oder sage es - sonst halt die K....

(2) Ganzer Satz: absoluter nonsense; streichen oder umformulieren!

meine Korrektur: fett = korrigiert/eingefügt; [---] = gestrichen


Persönliche Stellungnahme: Die Tatsache, dass ich den vorliegenden Text korrigiert habe, besagt nicht, dass ich mit dem Text inhaltlich konform bin.

old-but-alert