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Hallo liebes Forum ich bin neu hier und wollte euch um Hilfe bitten, ich muss in englisch meine erste Präsentation halten, daher möchte mein Lehrer auch keine Satzbau, Grammatik oder Rechtschreibfehler haben, ich wurde mich freuen wenn ihr mir helfen könnt und euch meinen Text durchlesen könntet. Sagt mir auch ob die Informationen so verständlich sind. Vielen Dank im Voraus


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Child labour
Hello, Today I am here to talk to you about Child labour/ Hello, Today I will give you a Presentation about Child Labour
I will start with the definition of Child Labour. Then I will look at the forms of Child Labour. Next I will tell you something about the reasons of Child Labour also the consequences and the work area of girls and boys.Then I will tell you how many child worker gives worldwide. Finally I will tell you the pros and cons and also my own opinion.

Content
Definition
Forms of Child Labour
Reasons (of Child Labour)
Consequences
Work area
Child Labour worldwide ( Picture)
Pro and Contra
My Opinion
What is your opinion

1. Definition
Child Labour is when children under the age of 15 work more than 16 hours a day and when they are doing work that they should not be doing. This works stops them going to school and take away their childhood. It is also dangerous for the children and unsafe to their physical or emotional health.

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Definition

-(Child Labour is a ) work that children should not be doing
-Exploit and hurts
-full-time
-children in a age of 5 to 17 years
-depriving them of their childhood
2. Forms of Child Labour

There is no activity which is not done also by children. Most Children act in the so called informal sector, so where it no contracts.
They work with her parents in the agriculture, they works on the streets as a newsman/newswoman or as a maidservant.
There are many forms of Child Labour
Worldwide. Some Examples
Children are employed in
-mining and industry
-in manufacturing
-forced labour
-In farms and plantations, example coffee plantation

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-agricultural labour
-manufacturing
-slavery
-drug dealing
Child soldiers
-as a household help
Work on the street, example flower seller

3.Reasons

Poverty problem or missing education can be considered as one of the first reasons of child labour. In most of the cases poor families force their children to work in order to stay alive or live a better live. Moreover, in many countries the parents are too poor to pay school fees and necessary school material. Therefore, they do not send her children on the school. Over and over again parents hold for sensible to send children to the work as in the school. For the industry children are useful as workers because their size allowed them to move in small spaces in factories or mines where adults couldn’t fit. Child labourers often worked to help support their families, but were forced to resign an education.Dept slavery, a victim of kidnapping, slave trade and forced labour are other reasons why many children are delivered to working conditions .

4. Consequences

Debility: a result of underdeveloped children who doing heavy manual labour and working long hours in bad conditions and not earning enough to feed themselves acceptably.
For some work the children get no payment.
Child labour does more than deprive children of their education and mental and physical development they stole the childhood.
The children have many physical dangers - and death - from forced labour:
• Physical injuries and mutilations are caused by badly maintained machinery on farms and in factories, dangers in industries such as mining, ceramics and fireworks manufacture
• Pesticide poisoning. In Sri Lanka, pesticides kill more children than malaria or tetanus.
• Growth deficiency , children get shorter and lighter than other children; these deficiencies also impact on their adult life
• Long-term health problems, are often in countries where children are forced to work with dangerous chemicals
• HIV/AIDS , pregnancy, drug addiction and mental illness

5.Work area of girls and boys
In most parts of the world boys and girls are also likely to be doing child labour. But girls are more likely to be doing housework, how cleaning and making food.
Most children work in the agriculture example fishing(98 millions)
And 15 million children work in privat households. The large part of them are girls.
The work in the stone quarry is extremely dangerous. Mostly it is the job of the boys to breaking stone blocks with hammering

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-the children works as assistanst in the servicearea ( 54 millions)
- In the industry ( 12 millions)
Example stoneindustry or carpetindustry
-child labour is popular in the production of cottonseed.
This activity requires on the one hand a big number of workers, on the other hand a tactfulness, that is why girls are used with pleasure.
6. Child labour worldwide
Asia and the pacific still has the largest numbers ( this is 60 %)
There are 23 % of children in child labour in Africa
And there are 8 % of the child labourers in South America and in the other countries
7.
Pro
-Children learn responsibility at a young age
-child labour is a big help for poverty countries
-children that participate in work can help their families and they are able to earn money to buy clothing and something to eat
-children have special characteristics that are important in production facilities, example small hands

Cons
-Children workers have extremely difficult working conditions
-children do not have the chance to live a normal childhood
- they have health problems from chemical poisonings
- children who have worked in these conditions suffer from life long disabilities and die at young ages.

8. My opinion
My personal opinion about child labour is that child labour is bad and horrible thing to do young children. Because the children risk their health and they needs freedom and a education. I think that it will be better when child labour will be stopped and the families become a financial support. For example the adults should be paid at least in such a way that they can protect the living (Lebensunterhalt)of her family and the school fees and the school material of their children. So they are not made let work their children.
Frage von kepo1 | am 04.01.2016 - 23:34


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Antwort von LsD | 05.01.2016 - 22:09
Ein sehr langer Text ;-) Ich habe mal drübergelesen:

Child labour
Hello, Today I am here to talk to you about child labour/ Hello, Today I will give you a presentation about child labour (würde es immer kleinschreiben)
I will start with the definition of Child Labour.
Then I will look at the forms of Child Labour. Next I will tell you something about the reasons for Child Labour and also about the consequences and the work areas of girls and boys.Then I will tell you how many child workers there are worldwide. Finally I will tell you the pros and cons and also my own opinion.

Content
Definition
Forms of Child Labour
Reasons (for Child Labour)
Consequences
Work areas
Child Labour worldwide ( Picture)
Pro and Contra
My Opinion
What is your opinion

1. Definition
Child Labour is when children under the age of 15 work more than 16 hours a day (am Tag?) and when they are doing work that they should not be doing. This works stops them going to school and takes away their childhood. It is also dangerous for the children and unsafe for their physical or emotional health.

Für PowerPoint
Definition

-(Child Labour is a ) work that children should not be doing
-Exploit and hurts
-full-time
-children in a age of 5 to 17 years
-depriving them of their childhood
2. Forms of Child Labour

There is no activity (besser: job?) which is not also done also by children. Most children work in the so called informal sector, so where there are no contracts.
They work with their parents in the agriculture, they works on the streets as a newsman/newswoman or as a maid / servant.
There are many forms of Child Labour
Worldwide. Some Examples
Children are employed in
-mining and industry
-in factories
-forced labour
-In farms and plantations, for example coffee plantation

Für die Power Point

-agricultural labour
-manufacturing
-slavery
-drug dealing
-Child soldiers
-as a household help
Work on the street, for example selling flowers

3.Reasons

Poverty problem or missing education can be considered as one of the first reasons of child labour. In most of the cases poor families force their children to work in order to stay alive or live a better life. Moreover, in many countries the parents are too poor to pay school fees and necessary school material. Therefore, they do not send her children on the school. Over and over again parents hold for sensible to send children to the work as in the school (Verstehe den Satz nicht). For the industry children are useful as workers because their size allows them to move in small spaces in factories or mines where adults wouldn’t fit. Child labourers often worked to help support their families, but were forced to resign an education.Dept slavery, being a victim of kidnapping, slave trade and forced labour are other reasons why many children are delivered to working conditions ending up in child labour .

4. Consequences

Debility: a result of underdeveloped children who doing heavy physical labour and working long hours in bad conditions and not earning enough to feed themselves acceptably.
For some work the children get no payment.
Child labour does more than deprive children of their education and mental and physical development they stole the childhood. (stammt wohl aus deiner Vorlage ;-) Bitte Quelle angeben!)
The children have many physical dangers - and death - from forced labour:
• Physical injuries and mutilations are caused by badly maintained machinery on farms and in factories, dangers in industries such as mining, ceramics and fireworks manufacture
• Pesticide poisoning. In Sri Lanka, pesticides kill more children than malaria or tetanus.
• Growth deficiency , children get shorter and lighter than other children; these deficiencies also impact on their adult life
• Long-term health problems, are often in countries where children are forced to work with dangerous chemicals
• HIV/AIDS , pregnancy, drug addiction and mental illness

5.Work areas of girls and boys
In most parts of the world boys and girls are also likely to be doing child labour. But girls are more likely to be doing housework, like cleaning and making food.
Most children work in the agriculture like for example fishing(98 millions)
And 15 million children work in privat households. The large part of them are girls.
The work in the stone quarry is extremely dangerous. Mostly it is the job of the boys to breaking stone blocks with hammers

Für die Power point
-the children works as assistanst in the service_area ( 54 millions)
- In the industry ( 12 millions)
Example stone_industry or carpet_industry
-child labour is popular in the production of cotton_seed.
This activity requires on the one hand a big number of workers, on the other hand a tactfulness (?), that is why girls are used with pleasure.

6. Child labour worldwide
Asia and the pacific still have the largest numbers ( this is 60 %)
There are 23 % of children in child labour in Africa
And there are 8 % of the child labourers in South America and in the other countries

7.
Pro
-Children learn responsibility at a young age
-child labour is a big help to fight poverty in poor countries
-children that participate in work can help their families and they are able to earn money to buy clothing and something to eat
-children have special characteristics that are important in production facilities, example small hands

Cons
-Children workers suffer from extremely difficult working conditions
-children do not have the chance to live a normal childhood
- they have health problems from chemical poisonings
- children who have worked in these conditions suffer from life long disabilities and die at young ages.

8. My opinion
My personal opinion about child labour is that child labour is bad and a horrible thing to do to young children. Because the children risk their health and they rather need freedom and a education. I think that it will be better when child labour will be stopped and the families recieve a financial support. For example the adults should be paid at least in such a way that they can make a living (Lebensunterhalt) for their families and pay the school fees and the school material for their children. So they are not forced to make their children work.
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Antwort von kepo1 | 05.01.2016 - 22:17
vielen dank, wie finden sie es für eine 8 min Präsentation ist es oki so oder haben sie Verbesserung Vorschläge


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Antwort von princessleah | 07.01.2016 - 18:14
Mit dem Satz, den LsD nich versteht, könnte ich aushelfen. Wahrscheinlich meinst du, dass Eltern es für okay halten, ihre Kinder arbeiten zu schicken anstatt zur Schule.

So, I think you should say something like:

Over and over again parents think it`s reasonable to send their children to work instead of to school.

Hat vielleicht nicht viel gebracht, aber trotzdem. Viel Glück bei deiner Präsentation

~Princess Leah


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Antwort von kepo1 | 08.01.2016 - 12:37
Vielen Dank

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