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By extreme air pollution 3,000 people die in capital of Afghanistan per year.


Terrorist attacks and rocket attacks of the Taliban make this live of the inhabitants on Kabul very hard. However, apparently the biggest danger lies in the air: Around 3,000 people, so explains the national environment protection office, die per year in the capital of Afghanistan as a result of the environmental pollution.



Kabul belongs worldwide to ten towns with the worst air pollution. Particularly in winter if snow and ice block the streets and pollute exhaust gas and stove smoke the air smog already lies with the afternoon about the town. Eyes and noses burn, the air smells of brown coal.



Between 70 and 90 percent of the air pollution in Kabul should go on the account of inferior fuels, the environment protection office of the country estimates. The fusel oil is sold illegally from the neighbouring states Pakistan and Iran to Afghanistan. With the bad fuel it is cooked, heated, car is driven and light is made. Every year there are accidents and fires because the fuel is not sure.


Besides, he dirties the air.

The polluted air adds particularly old people, sick people and children. Breath way illnesses, infections and asthma increase.

Appeals to the government to forbid the cheap fuel oil remained up to now without appreciable success.

Some time ago though the government has closed a few smaller enterprises, the dirty diesel oil expelled, however, this was rather an eyewash.

Since without bad fuel oil nothing more would function in Kabul in winter.


Because one does not get on on the supply side, now the government has turned to the inquiry side and has smashed an unusual way for the improvement of the aerial quality


Dankeschön
GAST stellte diese Frage am 04.06.2011 - 13:32


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Antwort von Caroline_20 | 04.06.2011 - 13:35
hallo,

naja, ich bin zwar eine niete in englisch, aber was dir helfen könnte sind vielleicht diese bindewörter, z.B.
:

- also
- moreover
- firstly, secondly
- furthermore
- the next point ist,that
- on the one hand, on the other hand
- the advantage/ the disadvantage is, that...




viel erfolg :-)

 
Antwort von GAST | 04.06.2011 - 13:48
Wo denn z.ß ? In welchem Satz ?


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Antwort von Caroline_20 | 04.06.2011 - 13:51
Zum Beispiel kannst du es so angehen:

- At first, I want to say that because of an extreme air pollution 3,000 people die in capital of Afghanistan per year.


- Furthermore terrorist attacks and rocket attacks of the Taliban make this live of the inhabitants on Kabul very hard.



und dann versuch mal deinen satz umzuschreiben

:-)


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Antwort von flo18 (ehem. Mitglied) | 04.06.2011 - 13:52
-die in "the" capital of A. every year
-inhabitants of kabul
-belongs worldwide to the ... du vergisst ständig das "the" ..... naja guck selber nochmal

 
Antwort von GAST | 04.06.2011 - 14:04
ok und sonst ist alles ok ?


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Antwort von Waveboarder (ehem. Mitglied) | 04.06.2011 - 14:32
Zitat:
By the extreme air pollution 3,000 people die in capital of Afghanistan per year.

Terrorist attacks and rocket attacks of the Taliban make the live of the inhabitants on Kabul very hard. However, apparently the biggest danger lies in the air: Around 3,000 people, so the national environment protection office explains , die in the capital of Afghanistan per year as a result of the environmental pollution.



Kabul belongs worldwide to ten citys with the worst air pollution. Particularly in winter when snow and ice block the streets and pollute exhaust gas and stove smoke the air smog already lies with the afternoon about the town. Eyes and noses burn, the air smells of brown coal.



Between 70 and 90 percent of the air pollution in Kabul should go on the account of inferior fuels, the environment protection office of the country estimates. The fusel oil is sold illegally from the neighbouring states Pakistan and Iran to Afghanistan. With the bad fuel it is cooked, heated, car is driven and light is made. Every year there are accidents and fires because the fuel is not sure.


Besides, it dirties the air.

The polluted air adds particularly old people, ill people and children. Breath way illnesses, infections and asthma increase.

Appeals to the government to forbid the cheap fuel oil remained up to now without appreciable success.

Some time ago though the government has closed a few smaller enterprises, the dirty diesel oil expelled, however, this was rather an eyewash.

Since without bad fuel oil nothing more would function in Kabul in winter.


Because no one is getting on the supply side, now the government has turned to the inquiry side and has smashed an unusual way for the improvement of the aerial quality



Das war zwar bestimmt nicht alles, aber ich hoffe ich konnte dir helfen.


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Antwort von Waveboarder (ehem. Mitglied) | 04.06.2011 - 14:38
Ach ja und übrigens, wie flo schon geschrieben hat, musst du darauf achten dass du immer das the bedenkst.

 
Antwort von GAST | 04.06.2011 - 18:23
Ich gehe hier von waveboarders Korrektur aus:


Zitat:
3,000 people die in the capital of Afghanistan each year because of the extreme air pollution

Terrorist attacks and rocket attacks of the Taliban make the
lives of the inhabitants in Kabul very hard. However, apparently the biggest threat comes fromthe air: Around 3,000 people, so the national environment protection office explains , die in Kabul each year as a result of the environmental pollution.



Kabul belongs to the ten cities worldwidewith the worst air pollution. Particularly in winter when snow and ice block the streets and exhaust gas and stove smoke pollute the air smog already lies above the city in the afternoon . Eyes and noses burn, the air smells of brown coal.



Between 70 and 90 percent of the air pollution in Kabul is the result of the use of inferior fuels, the environment protection office of the country estimates. The fusel oil is sold illegally
by the neighbouring states Pakistan and Iran to Afghanistan. This bad fuel is used for cooking, heating, lighting and driving cars . Every year there are accidents and fires because the fuel is not secure.


Besides, it pollutes the air.

Particularly old people, ill people and children suffer from the polluted air. Broncial diseases, infections and asthma have increased in the last years.

Appeals to the government to ban this cheapfuel oil have remained without any appreciable success up to now.

Some time ago the government closed a few smaller enterprises which had producedthe dirty diesel oil (?), however, this was rather an eyewash.

Nothing would function without this bad fuel oil any morein Kabul in winter.


As no-one is getting on the supply side, now the government has turned to the inquiry side and has smashed an unusual way for the improvement of the aerial quality (absolut unverständlich!)

 
Antwort von GAST | 04.06.2011 - 20:02
Dankeschön an euch allen :)

 
Antwort von GAST | 05.06.2011 - 01:42
Zitat:
Dankeschön an euch allen


Leider schon wieder falsch:

entweder: "Dankeschön an euch alle"

oder "Dankeschön euch allen"


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Antwort von Jup33 (ehem. Mitglied) | 05.06.2011 - 01:52
Da muss nicht live sondern life hin :).


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Antwort von matata | 05.06.2011 - 02:03
Das ist ein Irrtum @ Jupp33:

life (singular)
lives (plural)
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