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Bitte meinen englischen Text korrigieren!

Frage: Bitte meinen englischen Text korrigieren!
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Hey, ich habe den Text schoneinmal korrigiert, aber ich bin mir zeimlich sicher das noch einige Fehler vorhanden sind. Wäre nett wenn ihr nochmal nachschauen könntet, denn Englisch ist nicht grad mein bestes Fach. Danke im Vorraus!




“I never really wanted to earn money with my hobby, but I realized it too late. When I was 12 years old, my favourite activity was always drawing. I loved it to design clothes and to represent my mind in my pictures. Therefore I often got compliments from my friends and parents. I really enjoyed it to draw and to design, but that changed some years later.
On my 16th birthday I got a letter with a good offer from an advertising agency. They wanted me to draw their promotional comic for 600 €. I decided to accept the offer, but actually I had enough stress in school. The next day I told it to my friends, but they only thought, I shouldn’t overdo it with my ambition. Within the next few months, I always got such offers, but for them I received only a set of the announced price. After a while I didn’t know whether I should trust this offers anymore. I was angry, because to be pulled over the table was definitely not what I wanted. So I decided to stop with designing and drawing.
Today, I know that there are only a minimum of all advertising agency who work seriously with their designers and I started again with drawing. Now I’m on the Art & Design University in New York and I’m very happy.”
Frage von Wolfslady00 (ehem. Mitglied) | am 19.01.2011 - 19:17


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Antwort von Desire03 (ehem. Mitglied) | 23.01.2011 - 13:30
Hallo Wolfslady00,

Zitat:
I never really wanted to earn money with my hobby

-> bei "never" oder "ever" verwendet man eine andere Zeit als simple past, es müsste "I have never really wanted"
Zitat:
my favourite activity was always drawing.

-> s.o.


Zitat:
I loved it to design clothes and to represent my mind in my pictures.

-> I loved to (without "it")

Zitat:
I really enjoyed it to draw and to design,..

-> I really enjoyed to draw and design / I really enjoyed drawing and designing..

Zitat:
I got a letter

-> I received a letter

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I always got such offers

-> s.o.
-> "to get offers" gibt es so an sich glaube ich nicht, müsstest du umschreiben.

Zitat:
I received only

-> I only received

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to stop with designing and drawing.

-> without "with"

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of all advertising agency

-> agencies

Zitat:
who work seriously with their designers and I started again with drawing.

-> die beiden Sätze haben keinen Zusammenhang, außer du schreibst "und deshalb fing ich wieder für mich an, zu zeichnen" oder einfach in einem neuen Satz die Tatsache erklären.
-> I started again drawing

LG,
Desire03

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