Englisch Hilfe - Characterization

Liebe e-hausaufgabe Mitglieder ich benötige dringend eure Hilfe.
Unzwar habe ich eine Characterization auf englisch geschrieben und ich wollte fragen ob es so in Ordnung ist.
Wundert euch nicht über die vielen Fehler :D

The person I would like to characterize is Andrea from the short story "The Pressure Cooker" by Steve Skidmore and Steve Barlow.


Andrea is about 18 years old and an American.
Andrea has an older brother Ian, who is already complete with the university.
She lives with her brother and her mother. The father left the family. Andrea´s best friend is Dawn with whom she spends a lot of time.
Andrea has also a boyfriend called Graham.
She is currently attending a school and wants to go to school in a drama college.
Her mother would like that she studied as her big brother.
Andrea respects her mother and is also very helpful.
She isn´t disrespectful not to her own mother and not to other people.
It is remarkable that Andrea takes the school very seriously.
She`s failed in a test exam and was very frustrated about it and had a great fear of her mother.
Because she did not want to disappoint her mother.
Although there is only one test exam, she took this test very seriously.
That shows that Andrea a very committed person is.
Andrea is a person who takes almost everything seriously.
I believe that Andrea takes a lot of things too personally.
In addition I beliebe that Andrea is very sensible.
In line 102 we can see very well, that Andrea is very suspicious and jealous.
In line 111-113 we can see that she is in love with Graham really scary.
Andrea cannot derail their goals. She does what she likes best.
Characteristic is that Andrea can not restrain their emotions controlle respectively.
She responds very emotional.
She is very determined and consistent.
The overall impression of her character is very positive.




In summary we can say that Andrea is a very emotional person.