A short text. Teil 2.

Hallöchen. Hier ist noch ein weiterer Text von mir, den ich als Hausaufagbe schreiben sollte. Könnte den mal jemand auf Fehler untersuchen? Danke im Vorraus.


In my opinion the sketch (Skizze) isn`t as well as is it can be. Because it shows that the relationship between mother and father is `hostile` but in the text you can`t see any serious disputes. So the word `hostile` is exaggerated. So i will suggest `friendly` or something like that. The relationship between father and child isn`t presented very correctly. Just because the two argue, the relationship isn`t `very close`, it`s exaggerated. I will say it is just `close` because in line 84 and 85 Jacky said `My classmates may be common but at least they care about me. More than he does!` The relationship between mother and child is presented corretly. It`s friendly. Mother and child understand each other well and the mother is talking even nice and lovely with her child (Line 8 and 9 )