Englisch Hausaufgaben kurzer Text

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schonmal danke im vorraus !

1.
Dawn is good at school. Her parents want her to go to university. She is often alone at home, spent a lot of time with her friends and loves partys.
She is humorous and a funny personne but she don`t like jokes of Graham. Andrea and Graham are friends of Dawn.

2. Dawn is seventeen years old and live in the big house of her parents.
The parents of Dawn have a full time job and so they get a lot money but they aren`t often at home. Dawn is often at partys and drinks there a lot of alcohol and smokes cigarettes. She has a faked identity card. Despite her criminal aktivities she is very good at school so she can go to university. All in all Dawn is a nice, Helpfull and homorous person with some criminal aktivities.