Rede schreiben... Bitte bei der Kontrolle helfen

Hey Leute,
Ich erklär euch erstmal wie die Aufgabenstellung war.
Also ich muss in Englisch eine Rede schreiben und das Thema konnten wir frei wählen.

Ich hab mich für das Thema "Schwangerschaft bedeutet Verantwortung" entschieden. Ich weiß, dass es kein hammer Thema ist, aber ich dachte mir da kann man einiges zuschreiben.
So mein Problem ist, dass ich die größte Niete in Englisch überhaupt bin^^
Ich hab es aber trotzdem versucht^^
Wär super lieb, wenn hier mal rüberschauen könnt, damit ich nicht (wie immer) total blöd da stehe...
bitte nicht lachen;)


Pregnancy connotes responsibility
With the beginning of a pregnancy starts a time of extra responsibility.
Now the own life is not only dependent on the personal lifesdecision, but also a second life, which grows up.
But today more and more young people get very early parents. At first the fact does not seem to be the problem, rather how the young people deals with this situation.
Many teenager are often overwhelmed even during pregnancy, because the life styles of young people are changing abruptly. Now it does not call: Where we make Party at this weekend? And where we go before there? Cocktail bar or saloon?
No, now it does call strict alcohol and smoking forbiddance, because the consume of cigarerettes, even passive smoking, and the pleasure of alcohol can be particularly harmful to the unborn child in the womb.
But not only teenager underestimate these facts. No! Almost every second woman in Germany drink alcohol during preagnancy. These have to be thought of times. Every second woman harms her unborn child. There you can only hope that the responsibility is greater after pregnancy.
There are women, who are over 40, who try to have a baby for years. Them have no more time to fulfil the baby wish.
Women who desperately want a baby, have no baby, but teenager, who do not even have a school education and are overwhelmed with the situation, or women, who do not have responsibility and drink alcohol during pregnancy, have a baby.
Is not that unfair?

Jetzt schonmal DANKE DANKE DANKE:)