englischtext korrigieren

hallo zusammen

ihr würdet mir echt mega helfen wenn ihr zeit hättet meine aufsatz schenll zu korrigieren.
habe englisch nicht so gerne, aber dieser aufsatz wird am dienstag leider benotet.
herzlichen dank!

„ DO GOOD MANNERS MATTER? “

The discussion about if nowadays young peole are well educated and decent is rather widespread. However there is no general opinon about it, because of the fact that it is a personal thing to decide if someone has good or bad manners. Nevertheless there exist some things, which are important to notice if you want to be known as a well educated person.

Firstly, it’s indespensable to talk always respectfully to other, of course especially to yours superiors. This doesn’t mean that you are not allowed to tell them your opinion, but you have to be able to decide when your opinon is asked and when it’s inappropriate to make a comment. Secondly, you should pay attention that you are never unfair towards your fellwo men. Otherwise you will quickly be known as an egoistic and self-centred person.

In my estimation it’s particularly important to attend on how we behave in the public. This because someone with bad manners is extremly ardous for thoses people who have to live or work with him. When your are well educaded, I mean when you think also of the others than only for yourself then you can be sure, that other people will like you. Furthermore you can also exspect that they will be respectfully and social with you in return.