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Ich habe die Aufgabe bekommen über die Weihnachtsferien ein science fiction buch zu lesen (The Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy) und anschließend eine kurze summary über das Kapitel 7 des buchs mit ca 350 Wörtern zu verfassen.
Der Abgabeterrmin ist am 10.1.17

Der Inhalt sollte soweit passen. was für mich relevant ist, sind grammatik, rechtschreibung und das zusammenspiel der zeiten (letzteres v.a. ab dem unteren drittel des textes).

sollten unklarheiten zum inhalt oder sonst welche auftauchen, könnt ihr fragen oder einfach auf folgenden link gehen, dort sollten die nötigen informationen zum inhalt vorkommen (Wie gesagt ich muss nur Kapitel 7 zusammenfassen). --> http://www.shmoop.com/hitchhikers-guide-to-the-galaxy/chapter-7-summary.html

Hier mein Text:

Chapter 7 - The Hitchhikers Guide To The Galaxy

Right before the earth became eliminated, the hitchhikers Arthur Dent and Ford Prefect were rescued by the Dentrassi into a spaceship of the Vogons. The Dentrassi are a species of alien who cook for the Vogons. The only reason they picked up the two hitchhikers is because they like irking the Vorgons. The latter are one of the most unpleasant races in the galaxy, who normally wouldn’t do anything to help any other species with something. The captain of the Vogon fleet is Prostetnic Vogon who is cruel, bureaucratic and like any other Vogon he writes terrible poetry. Because of him Arthur and Ford are prisoners of the Vogon in chapter 7 of the novel The Hitchhiker’s Guide To The Galaxy.

When you start out reading this chapter, you will learn how dangerous poetry can be.
In this novel, (especially Vogon) poetry could make people die of internal bleeding. So it is bad news for Arthur and Ford when Prostetnic Vogon Jeltz starts to read his poetry to them.
Especially because they are strapped into “Poetry Appreciation Chairs”. Furthermore, they have additional devices hooked up to make sure they really get the “poetry”. With a callous smile, Prostetnic Vogon Jeltz begins reading, and right away the prisoner writhe (krümmen) in agony (=torture). After a few sentences Jeltz stops and wanted to know from the prisoners how good his poem was. The poem was cruel, but rising to the occasion, Arthur tells the Vogon that he liked it and alternately tries with Ford to impress with a handful meaningless but impressive sounding formations of words. Nevertheless, they can’t sweet-talk their way out of trouble and as a result of this, Jeltz orders Arthur and Ford off the ship where they would die within 30 seconds.
Now Arthur and Ford have got a second chance and now they try to convince the Vogon guard that he doesn’t have to throw them into an airlock and subsequently into space. However, after a long discussion about the guard’s live, they failed and get thrown into an airlock.
A little time later the door opens and both friends are thrown out into space.

Ich bedanke mich für eure Mühe und wünsche euch allen einen guten Rutsch ins neue Jahr!
Lg Lukas
Frage von lukas1001 | am 02.01.2017 - 16:31


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Antwort von Ratgeber | 02.01.2017 - 17:34
Ohne die Geschichte zu kennen, hier einige stilistische und korrigierende Anmerkungen:

Right before the earth became eliminated, the hitchhikers Arthur Dent and Ford Prefect were rescued by the Dentrassis into a spaceship of the Vogons.
The Dentrassis are a species of alien who cook for the Vogons. The only reason they picked up the two hitchhikers is because they like irking the Vorgons. The latter are one of the most unpleasant races in the galaxy, who normally wouldn’t do anything to help any other species with something. The captain of the Vogon fleet is Prostetnic Vogon who is cruel, bureaucratic and like any other Vogon he writes terrible poetry. Because of him Arthur and Ford are prisoners of the Vogon in chapter 7 of the novel The Hitchhiker’s Guide To The Galaxy.

When you start out reading this chapter, you will learn how dangerous poetry can be.
In this novel, (especially Vogon) poetry could make people die of internal bleeding. So it is bad news for Arthur and Ford when Prostetnic Vogon Jeltz starts to read his poetry to them.
Especially because they are strapped into “Poetry Appreciation Chairs”. Furthermore, they have additional devices hooked up to make sure they really get the “poetry”. With a callous smile, Prostetnic Vogon Jeltz begins reading, and right away the prisoners writhe with pain. After a few sentences Jeltz stops and wants to hear from his listeners how good his poem was. The poem was cruel, but rising to the occasion, Arthur tells the Vogon that he liked it and alternately tries with Ford to impress with a handful meaningless but impressive sounding formations of words. Nevertheless, they can’t sweet-talk their way out of trouble and as a result of this, Jeltz orders Arthur and Ford off the ship where they would die within 30 seconds.
Now Arthur and Ford have got a second chance and now they try to convince the Vogon guard that he doesn’t have to throw them into an airlock and subsequently into space. However, after a long discussion about the guard’s life, they fail and get thrown into an airlock, where a little time later the door opens and both friends are kicked out into space.


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Antwort von lukas1001 | 02.01.2017 - 17:50
Vielen dank für die schnelle antwort. ich dachte da wären einige gröbere schnitzer drin, aber umso besser gab es irgendwo unklarheiten bzw probleme dem geschriebenen zu folgen?

ps: ich werde den text in der angabe editieren, damit die übersicht bewahrt wird und andere auch noch relativ unumständlich drüberkorrigieren können wenn sie wollen.
geht wohl nicht mehr, aber wie ich sehe hast du du das eh schon vorbildlich gelöst indem du den ganzen text reinkopiert hast
lg


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Antwort von lukas1001 | 05.01.2017 - 16:06
ich habe die summary jetzt doch noch fortgesetzt, vielleicht könnte auch die fortsetzung noch jemand korrigieren. danke

Chapter 8 teaches its readers that space is too big for people to really understand its infinite widths. Even light takes its time to spread through space from one star to another one. Moreover, this chapter gives us a small insight how tiny the probability is of being picked up from space by spaceship within 30 seconds (2^267,791 to 1). Nevertheless, Ford and Arthur got accidentally rescued by a passing spaceship.
Chapter 9:
The ship that picked up the two friends happens to be the ’Heard of Gold’, which is a new spaceship that was stolen by Zaphod earlier. Occupants of the spaceship before Ford and Arthur were picked up were Trillian, Marvin, Eddie(annoying Board Computer) and Zaphod himself. After Arthur and Ford’s arrival, Trillian is calmly reading off probability figures.
Chapter 10
This short chapter tells us all about the Infinite Improbability Drive, which is useful for teleporting people from one location to another. Scientists were only able to calculate finite improbability. But one student accidentally found out how to calculate “Infinity” , and recognized the Infinite Improbability Drive, which can take you anywhere in space in no time.
Chapter 11
In Chapter 11 Arthur and Ford learned to know Marvin, who is a very depressed robot who doesn`t want to do anything. Marvin welcomes them to the Heart of Gold by telling them how terrible life is and escorts them to the command centre of the spaceship, where they meet Trillian and Zaphod.
After they were introduced to each other and some brief talks, Episode 2 ends.


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Antwort von Ratgeber | 05.01.2017 - 16:50
Chapter 9 ...
After the arrival of Arthur and Ford (ist weniger fehlerträchtig als die Verwendung von Genitiven; denn dann hättest Du "After Arthur`s and Ford’s arrival" schreiben müssen, und das klingt sehr denglisch), Trillian is calmly reading off probability figures.

Chapter 11
In Chapter 11 Arthur and Ford get to to know Marvin, (who is => würde ich weglassen) a very depressed robot who doesn`t want to do anything.
After they are introduced to each other and some brief talks, Episode 2 ends.

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