Geschichte im Simple Past

Zitat:
Once upon a time, there was a very old snake who lived in a small house. In the house stood a table, a lamp, a chair a mirrow for toothbrush and a bookshelf. One day the old snake decided to walk into the village with a rope. It was a very hot day and the snake was very thin an hungry. He needed to sit down. There was a young butterfly next to the fence. He watched the old snake for a moment. The butterfluy offered and the old shnake his kettle bread and soup with toast. Then the butterfluy helped the old snake to walk back to his house with beautiful fence. The old snake smiled and thanked him. Whe he a arrieved home in the evening, the young butterfluy locked in the pocket of his trousers and discovered a little beautiful bag. He opened the bag. It contained four large gold choins. The butterfluy was very surprised.

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