Englisch Bewerbung korrigieren :)

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Meine Praktikumsstelle hat mir geschrieben, dass ich mich nochmal vorstellen soll, sowie meine absolvierten Kurse und Arbeitserfahrungen darstellen soll.
Es wäre gut wenn mit jemand bei der Korrektur helfen kann, da ich weiß, dass der Text nicht wirklich perfekt ist. Ich mache übrigens ein Praktikum in der Dermatologie Abteilung eines Krankenhauses.

Dear Sirs and Madams, *
I`m 17 years old and im currently attending the 11th class of the ** Gymnasium in ** , which I will finish with the advanced technical certificate in 2017. My mother language is German, but I also speak Englisch, Russian and French. ** I frequently work as a volunteer helper in church and I go babysitting. In 2014 I made an intership in the eye clinic in * . There I have collected my first impression of a of a job in the medicine trade. I also have made two language courses, one in Malta and the otherone in Eastbourne. Additionally I have made tree First-Aid courses, in 2008 for beginners, in 2013 and a First-Aid course in 2015 for my driver license. In the future I want to study medicine, so I`m very interested in the area of Dermatology. With the work experience in the ** Hospital I can collect practical knowledge about these area. **I`m also a very open-minded person, so I`m not afraid to reach strangers. I`m receptive, friendly, communicative and a teamplayer.
I would be glad to get this change of a work experience. I look forward to hear from you.

Yours sincerely **