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Jasmin Ali is an Asian woman from the second generation, her problem is that she is between tow cultures. Her own culture and the Western culture is differrent, but her main problem is clothing, because modern clothing is too revecling. I mean with modern clothing the mini dress or cropped. She has got fpund the solution JAsmin als wears shalvar kameez at home and while she works jeans and jacket. So she finds a mixture between the Asian-style and the mode. She has got an own shop. Her father is proud oh JAsmin, because he has got the opinion that nobody can force a tradition, that means she is free to do everything what she wants.

2 In the following text I want to comment on Ali´s last sentence. In the film " East is East" we saw that nobody can reach anything with violence. George doesn´t accept the wishes of his family, his children and wife must listen to him and lived the way he wants them to.