Englisch: Korrektur/Verbesserung

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the Earth
were only a few feet in diameter,
floating a few feet above a field somewhere,
people would come from everywhere to marvel
at it.
People would walk around it marveling at its
big pools of water, its little pools and the water flowing
between. People would marvel at the bumps on it and the
holes in it. They would marvel at the very thin layer of gas
surrounding it and the water suspended in the gas. The people
would marvel at all the creatures walking around the surface of
the ball and at the creatures in the water. The people would
declare it as sacred because it was the only one, and they would
protect it so that it would not be hurt. The ball would be the
greatest wonder known, and people would come to pray to
it, to be healed, to gain knowledge, to know beauty and
to wonder how it could be. People would love it, and
defend it with their lives because they would
somehow know that their lives could be
nothing without it. If the Earth were
only a few feet in
diameter.


If the Earth were only a few feet in diameter... is a poem from Joe Miller.
The poem is about us “small” and “defenseless” world. The Earth was destroyed of people.

The world is very small, it is swimming about a field. Humans come from everywhere to see the small earth. People would it marvelling, there are big and small polls, holes on the small ball, very thin layer of gas surrounding, the humans and animals walking on the earth. Just the people want to defend the defenseless planet. The humans want to come, because they are injured, to gain knowledge. The world is beautiful. People would like and protect the earth, because without this small planet, the people would be nothing!


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The message of this poem is, that the people destroy more and more the world. Many humans do not think about the future. They build many factories, hotels, roads and develop military weapons. After reading this poem, people would think about the future of the earth and maybe they will change something.

l. 3-5) The world is small. It could be a globe, too.
l. 5-6( big pools of water, ist litle pools) The poet means that are oceans, seas and rivers.
7-8) (bums/holes) The people destroyed the nice world. The all oil and uranium was pumped out or the humans destroyed the world with nuclearweapons, you can see that in line 15 (to be healed. the people are injured)
8-9) thin layer of gas... This sentence means that CO2 are in the air throughout factorys, planes and so one. (the water suspended in the gas) It can be that there was dropped the atomic bombe. Only one atomic bombe much destroy.
10-11) (The people would marvel at all the creatures walking around.......) The people and animals have changed.(mutation)
11-19) The people goint to protect the earth. The humans realized his mistakes.
( to be healed, to gain knowledge, to know beauty, and to wonder how it could be.)
The people are injured, they know just how can be beautiful the world and the humans cannot understand how they could it destroyed. Without the earth the peole can not survive.
There is an example of anaphora, people ( l. 5,7,16) the people ( l. 9, 11,) they,8, the ball
symbol: Earth-life, big pools of water- ozean

The sentence “ If the Earth were only a few feet in diameter..., comes at the beginning and at the end. The world is portrayed very small and defenseless.The poem show us the future of the Earth. Joe Miller show not directly, what there was happend on Earth. The poet want to that the peole who read this poem, think self how was destroeyd the world. Than this people think about their future, and they know that the world can be destroyed
It is not late, but time is running.Together we can help the world.

The poem consists out one stanza with 20 lines.
parallelism: if the Earth.... ( l. /19). people would ( 5, 7, 16) the people would...
repetition: Earth,people/would, marvell
The poem is round as the Earth. It is a narrative poem.
I think this poem very good, I had think about the future of the Earth. This poem is encrypted. It show what can be happen with our planet. I want to change something, too. This poem show us that ic can be happen really and we must do together something for the Earth.