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The Three Peaks Challenge Summary

The story is about Alistair, Russell, Russell’s dad, and his dad’s friend Andy, how they do the 40 km walk in Yorkshire.
They have to go over three mountains: The Pen-y-ghent, the Whernside and the Ingleborough. It is told from Alistair’s point of view.
The 4 people are the only person who do this walk, because of the month. It is a long way so they packs everything necessary. At half past eight, they gets up Pen-y-ghent. It is the easiest of the three.
Then the long way to Whernside. This is probably the hardest one, because you go straight up.
When the 4 are at the top they firstly do a five minutes break, eats their sandwiches and moves on. At the top of Whernside, Russell and Alistair left Russell’s dad and Andy. So Alistair and Russell go down on their own. They went up Ingleborough, this is probably the worst one, then they just go down the wrong side. They go without a map. Russell’s dad and Andy did it in ten hours. Alistair and Russell comes half an hour later.
All of them get a badge. It was brilliant and a great