Englische Bewerbung Korrekturlesen

Ich musste in Englisch eine Bewerbung schreiben für eine Stelle als Rezeptionist in einem Hotel in Großbritannien. PS: Wie kann man die "Fachoberschulreife" ins Englische übersetzten und mit welchen englischen Abschluss kann man sie vergelichen?


Dear Mrs Enke,
Job offering: receptionist
I saw your advertisement for a nine month placement as a receptionist on the jobboerse.arbeitsagentur.de website and would like to apply for this position. I would be available to start work in July this year.
I am currently doing a two-year course at a vocational college in Berlin, Germany. At the end of this course I will obtain my (Fachoberschulreife) qualification. After finishing school I would like to do a placement in the UK to collect work experience abroad and to improve my English knowledge.
As you will see from my CV, I have previous work experience as I have already done a three-week placement in a hotel 5 years before. I have got an insight into the hotel industry and had to do a wide range of different activities, but at most I liked the contact with hotel guests. Therefore I am very interested in a placement as a receptionist. As a part of my college course last year, I successfully completed a one-year placement in the German automobile concern Volkswagen AG. This placement showed me that I am able to work under pressure. I often had to communicate with suppliers in English so I have a good knowledge of business English. I enjoyed teamwork and get on well with my colleagues. They found me reliable and keen to learn. I have a wide range of interests including art and literature. In my free time I am going in for sports above all dancing.
I would very much welcome the opportunity to do a placement in a hotel the UK and believe that I would be an ambitious and hardworking employee. I hope that you will consider my application and look forward to hearing from you.