Argumentierender Text

Hallo, wir schreiben morgen eine Englisch Arbeit über das Thema Argumentierender Text und ein paar andere Themen. Ich habe einen Text über das Verbot des Handys in der Schule geschrieben, das sind ca 290 was glaub ich viel zu viel ist weil wir bestimmt 150 oder so schreiben müssen. Ich bitte um Korrektur und dann noch sagen was für eine Note ich ca für den Text bekommen würde.


You often hear people say that phones at the school should be banned, because you disturb the lesson. So the question is, should phones be banned or not?

Firstly, u can use your phone to cheat in tests. For example, when you write a class test and you dont know a word or how to solve a specific task, you can easily research or see in you pictures for the word. But the goal of the class test is, that you know all things without a phone or help.

Secondly, the phones disturbing(Wieso geht nicht disturbe?) the lesson when they ring. For example, you write an important class test and your phone begin to ring, because your friend is calling you, that would disturb the whole class.

Thirdly, pupils can take photos from teacher or another pupils. For example, you can take photos from a teacher and upload it on the Internet without asking him. But he cant control this.

Firstly, you can use it to research things that you need in the lesson. For example, you can research things about a person for your presentation.

Secondly, you can use it fast, if it is an important emergency in your family at home or on a pupil. For example, at school when anyone hurts heavy his knee or leg.

Thirdly, you can use it in the lesson to waste time. For example, if you have a long school day and you cant concentrate at the teacher anymore, you can use it quietly to waste the time.

To sum up, I would say that phones are useless, because you can concentrate more without them, and you cant cheat, because its unfair over other pupil.