Englisch Text in der Vergangenheit

Hallo ihr lieben ich soll diesen Englisch Text in die Vergangenheit schrieben hab schon was verändert aber ich glaube da fehlt noch was ?

Orginal Text:

You are having a terrible day.
First you oversleep, then as you hurry to the kitchen for some breakfast you trip over the dog and it bites your ankle. The wound bleeds a lot, so your mother bandages it and takes you to the doctor’s. You sit in the waiting room for an hour, and the ankle swells and hurts. When the doctor sees it he refers you to the hospital for an X-ray, On the way there your mother’s car runs out of petrol. You hop to a bus-stop and just catch a bus, then your mother finds she has left her purse in the car. The conductor lets you stay on the bus an he feels, sorry for you, and it’s not far to the hospital. After another long wait your turn finally comes. A nurse gives you an injection. As she jabs the needle in, it breaks. She then wheels you to X-ray department and arranges for you to go home in an ambulance afterwards. Your ankle is only sprained and the dog-bite is not too serious, but the doctor tells you to rest for a couple of days. This strikes you as good news – till it occurs to you that you plan to go to an open – air concert tomorrow. When you get home you try to phone your girl – friend to explain, but no one answers the phone.

Von mir verändert in Vergangenheit:

You are having a terrible day. First you oversleep, then as you hurry to the kitchen for some breakfast you trip over the dog and it bites your ankle. The wound bleeds a lot, so your mother bandages it and takes you to the doctor’s. You sat in the waiting room for an hour, and the ankle swelled and hurts. When the doctor sawit he refers you to the hospital for an X-ray, On the way there your mother’s car ran out of petrol. You hop to a bus-stop and just caught a bus, then your mother found she has left her purse in the car. The conductor lets you stay on the bus an he felt, sorry for you, and it’s not far to the hospital. After another long wait your turn finally came. A nurse gave you an injection. As she jabs the needle in, it broke. She then wheels you to X-ray department and arranges for you to went home in an ambulance afterwards. Your ankle is only sprained and the dog-bite is not too serious, but the doctor told you to rest for a couple of days. This struck you as good news – till it occurs to you that you plan to went to an open – air concert tomorrow. When you got home you try to phone your girl – friend to explain, but no one answers the phone.