englisch text korrigieren....

hallo zusammmen.

es wäre mega nett und für mich vor allem sehr hilfreich wenn jemand einen kurzen blick auf meinen englischaufsatz werfen können und sogleich die korrekturen anmeken könnet.
muss ihn eben morgen abgeben und bekomme wahrscheinlich auch eine note dafür..=/
herzlichen dank im voraus

PROBLEMS IN SWITZERLAND FACED BY YOUNG PEOPLE
Also in a high developed country like Switzerland young people have big and little problems. Naturally these problems have nothing to do with poorness. The rest of this essay supplies information about a two widespread problems from young people in Switzerland.
Firstly there is the problem that a great part from the youth doesn’t know how to deal with their money. During their leisure time they have such a lot of possibilities to spend their money. Cloths, parties, cars, own apartments, holidays are just some examples where they need money for. But the money isn’t enough to afford all these things. The consequent is that they have to learn to do without all these things. They have to decide which things they really want. Otherwise they are going to lung into dept because of borrowing money from fiends or even taking credits.
Secondly there is the problem that the youth nowadays has not enough stamina. If there are just little complications or problems you give everything up. This phenomenon is certifiable in everyday life. Friendship, school, work
In conclusion it’s to say that the youth is too idle and isn’t willing to beat for something or to do without something. These two problems are already created in our very early age. When a child gets everything he wants then he will not be able to do without something to beat for something in his adulthood, because has never learnt it.