Korrektur Englischaufsatz

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wir sollten nen Aufsatz im Stil einer Erörterung zum Thema "cloning" in Englisch schreiben (mind.
250 Wörter, meiner hat 390).
Hier meiner:

Cloning is a very actual but also tricky theme. Without laws it could be possible to clone not complete humans but organs in a few years. Although having bad sites, I think cloning is possible in the near future. The most important question is, is it good to have laws that restrict this research or shouldn’t there be any obstacles?

Answering this question you have to say for what to use this technology. Almost every progress is also used in crimes, so it is sure that there are lots of disadvantages.
Cloning will destroy the importance of children. Creating offspring in any order it will destroy the feeling of having a child. Because of this, almost any human will handle little children like a thing, if it “breaks down” (dies) it is replaced by another. I think this way of thinking is diabolical; it has nothing in common with a feeling being, so humans will became crueler than they are today.
Knowing how to clone allows medicals to check people for genetic disease and correct them. If we know how to clone organs or even humans means that we understand the human body completely (maybe except the brain). Medicals will be able to check embryos up for disease and even abolish them. I think it is great, because it is very sad when humans die before they start to live yet.
Cloning humans might allow creating a “perfect” soldier. If we can actually “produce” humans we should be able to change their characteristics. Some criminals may try to create an indestructible human to take control over a country.
Producing organs synthetic will save lots of lives. If medicals are able to manufacture organs like they need them no more people will die because there isn’t any organ donor for them. I find it doleful if someone dies only because of one not-working organ. There are so many possibilities to make live easier with new organs. Also you could live longer with new hearts for example.

Summarizing I have to say that I think cloning in general is very positive and important for the future. But if we want to use it as an advantage for everyone there are lots of rules we have to consider. If not, the outcome will be horrible and maybe even destroy the feeling human being.

geht das oder was müsste da noch verändert werden?!