Text bitte korrigieren

Würde dir so gerne helfen,
aber Englisch... mhm überhaupt nicht mein Fach!

solltest die zitate auch durch apostrophe kennzeichnen.
habe angefangen, das zu korrigieren, da ich aber das buch nicht kenne und die zitate nicht markiert sind, ist es für mich für bne gescheite korrektur etwas dumm^^

im deutschen heisst es dann (vgl s.70 z15)... ist es im englischen da nicht ähnlich?(zB durch (compare p.70) oder so?)

weiß jemand wie man:
"die unterschiedlicher nicht sein könnten" übersetzt?
zumindest so sinngemäß?

alles klar. sonst verbesserungen am text? ist super wichtig.

Im Englischen kürzt man das deutsche "vgl." als "cf." ab... ach, Baerchen hat´s schon drin. Hier meine Korrektur, leg doch die und die vom Baer nebeneinander und such dir raus, was du gebrauchen kannst. Wenn sich was doppelt, nicht wundern. Ich hab die obige Korrektur absichtlich nicht gelesen, das beeinflusst. ;)

In our lesson on 11th December, we mainly focussed on the caste system in Aldous Huxley`s novel “Brave New World”.
The World State in the novel is based on a system consisting of five castes with members of each caste sharing common characteristics, clothes, jobs and appearances.
All members of the "Alpha" caste are males, attractive and tall. They wear grey clothes and are powerfully built, deep-chested as well as springy (p.58, l.3-8). With their attitude to work hard, their cleverness and intelligence (p.26, l. 22), they form society’s elite and are in charge of the system.
Following the caste system´s hierarchy, the second caste is formed by the “Betas” wearing dark violet clothes, who are nearly attractive as the Alphas; the latter only have sex with pneumatic Beta women.
Although they hold intellectual jobs as well, they are not conditioned to work as hard as Alphas do (p.26. l.24).
“Gammas” are built quite normally, notwithstanding their slight proneness to a small physique. They wear green clothes and work as porters or do the kind of manual work that simply has to be done.
As opposed to the upper cases (Alphas and Betas), Gammas are specifically marked by the fact that they have no names and, even more important, no individuality.

The fourth caste, the “Deltas”, consists of members who are so "subnormal" that they are just able to read one-syllable words. They are conditioned to work as hangar-attendants or street workers (p. 57, l. 16). In addition to their underdeveloped bodies, Deltas can be identified by their khaki clothes.

The lowest caste is formed by the “Epsilons” dressed in black. They are neither able to read nor write; and they are barely able to communicate normally. In conclusion, they only hold simple jobs like liftmen (p.51, l. 18) or porters (p.51, l. 27). The narrator describes their appearance as monkey-like due to their small and deformed bodies.

In chapter four, the contrast between the different castes becomes visible when Lenina, who watches Gammas at work, says: “What an hideous colour khaki is […] I’m glad I’m not a Gamma” (p.55, l.7).

This attitude was INSTILLED IN Lenina during her childhood to preserve the systems` stability. (Das meinst du hier, denke ich, mit "hypnopaedical")
The conflict between the castes is not the only striking conflict in the novel, but a prevalent one. (Anmerkung hierzu: sonst klingt das so, als käme jetzt noch was zu den anderen Konflikten, tut´s ja aber nicht.)

Allgemein: du neigst dazu, an einigen Stellen Artikel oder Pronomen zu setzen, wo er im Englisch nicht hindarf. Z.B. "called THE Alphas", "they form THE society´s elite" oder auch später "Gammas at their work".

Now you go. :)