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Frage: Korrektur - Kleine Debatte
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Hallo zusammen

Könnt Ihr meine englisch Debatte korrigieren? Ich vermute es hat einige Fehler beim Satzaufbau.

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Thousands of people show up on a concert with full of energy to have their best time of life while others say they enjoy it more through online concert.
The question is which is better attending a concert, or watching the same concert at home?

On the one hand watching a concert at home plays no role where the location is. You save time and money because of the way to the concert.
On the other hand, there are a lot of important aspects missing for example the smell of the location, or the feeling to see the artist with your own eyes.

I enjoy it way more on a live concert because of the energy around and yourself. Of course, it is way more comfortable to watch it at home but it’s also very different like driving a bicycle in a game and actually driving a bicycle in the forest.
Frage von Trojan | am 06.04.2020 - 10:37


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Antwort von Ratgeber | 06.04.2020 - 20:58
Korrekturvorschläge:
  • Thousands of people go to a concert full of energy for having their best time of life,
    while others say that they enjoy it more by online concerts.
  • The question is, which is better: to go to a concert or to see the same concert at home?
  • On the one hand, watching a concert at home does not matter where the place is located.
  • And it has a big advantage: You save time and money!
  • On the other hand, there are a lot of important aspects like missing the smell of the location, or the feeling to see the artist with your own eyes.
  • I enjoy it even more being on a live concert because of the energy round me and myself.
  • Of course it is much more comfortable to watch it at home but, for instance, driving a bicycle in a game is also much more different than cycling in the woods.

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