About a boy: Summary eines Textausschnittes, Korrektur bitte

Guten tag alle zusammen, habe eine Hausaufgabe aufbekommen, wo ich einen Textauschnitt aus dem Buch About a boy einen summary schreiben muss und wo ich drauf achten muss das ich mich auf ein thema konzetriere.


Den Textausschnitt wer ich mal fotografieren und meinen summary füge ich unten hinzu,
bitte um verbesserungsvorschläge, hab ganz schwache englishkentnisse




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the text filling days from about a boy, written by Nick Hornby, is talking about will, who is unemployment
and how he create his daily routine.

Will is not proud what he still reach in his life.
But he enjoys the available time that he compare it
with large things like the enormous ocean .He talks about his relationships, that he has no colleagues and what kind of impression
he has of the worklife, that everything is easy to do.he split his day with 20 units, which every unit consist thirty minutes.Will is wondering
how his friends do two things at the same time, how they could take a bath after work.So finally he decides to apply for a job.
and thought that he fills the vacancies.Will never gets a reply because In preparation of his attitude with two oposite opinions.