Englisch- Proposal- Bitte um Korrektur

Hallo ihr Lieben!

Ich musste in Englisch einen Proposal für Österreich schreiben und da mein Englisch nicht gerade das Beste ist, würde ich mich freuen, wenn ihr mir sagt, wo ich Fehler gemacht habe.

Danke im Vorraus für eure Verbesserungsvorschläge!

Lg Michi


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Introduction

This proposal contains my suggestions for our country’s contribution to the international festival in London.


Outdoor life

I suggest we show a video so visitors can appreciate how thrilling it is to ski in our fabulous mountains.
Austria’s mountain resorts offer activities for the skier but also for non skier. Regions like the Arlberg, Innsbruck, the Montafon and Kitzbühel offer not only great outdoor activities but also cultural festivals.

We could also have photos showing animals living in the wildlife, for example the famous marmot, the golden eagle and the deer. Visitors would be amazed and captivated by the huge variety of wildlife in the National Parks, that offer visitors the chance to discover nature in its original, unpolluted state.


Contemporary arts

The Kunsthaus in Graz is world famous and I am sure visitors would enjoy a guide tour through the museum. The Kunsthaus is designed by Peter Cook and Colin Fournier and has an organic shape with a skin made of iridescent blue acrylic panels. I suggest we show some photos of the building because it is one of the most unusual museums of the world.


Tradition

A dirndl, which is also known as Landhausmode, is a type of traditional dress worn in Austria at main occasions like a wedding. I recommend a fashion display with dirndl and with leather breeches and I also suggest a live performance of traditional dances like “Schuachplattln” and music like “jodeln”.


Conclusion

My proposal would give visitors a real taste of Austrian outdoor life, arts and tradition, and I hope it meets with your approval.