Englisch Text... bitte um Korrektur

Hey,
wir sollten einen Text auf Englisch schreiben und es wäre sehr hilfreich, wenn jemand evtl mal drüber schauen könnte um vllt den ein oder anderen Fehler zu verbessern ;)

I just woke up.
It`s sunday. I would like to make an excursion with the whole family. At breakfast I will ask my parents.
Of course, I am a little bis afraid of it, because my parents deal severely with my little brother and me. We have to do what they want. For a start, I went in the bathroom. Then we all sat together on the breakfast table. I made the proposal, but nobody was really interested in it, but to my surprise my father agreed with it.
We went of after lunch. We were allowed to go on the sea.
The weather was not as good as it ought to be, but it was already autumn.
We had to put our churchgoing outfit on and the shoes had to shine. Nearly I had forgotten my hat. Without hat and bound hair, the girls aren`t allowed to go out on sundays. We also had to wear hats. We had to walk about an hour to reach the sea.
When we arrived, I could fet/feed the canards and swans during my parents talked to a married couple. It was quiet good and I got for a tenner sweeties what was very unusual.
The afternoon passed too fast, I had liked to stay longer there.
When we arrived at home, the churchgoing outfit had been cleaned immediately.
Then we had dinner and my sister helped mum to wash the dishes.
Our family talked a little bit over today, outdoor it became dark (= draußen wurde es schon dunkel)
There was no protest, I had to go in my room and (die Kleider richten) for tomorrow.

The autumn half-term were over, school goes again (= Die Herbstferien waren vorbei, jetzt geht wieder die Schule los)