Bitte um Korrektur

R.: Hello Martin. We would like to ask you a few questions.
As we know, you`re 15 years old, living in Eastbourne and attend (welche? high school, grammar school? genaue schulform hierein) school. Like many people you also had a hard time in your life. We not want to enlarge on it. (<--ich verstehe den sinn des satzes nicht, diese kombination habe ich im englischen noch nie gehört? schreib mir was du meinst auf deutsch und ich übersetzte es dir.) We are wondering, if you are doing better lately...

M.: Thank you. I feel better. I am trying to forget the mistake that i made.

R.: It is good to hear that you feel good.
You are currently attending school.Do you have any plans for the future yet?

M.: Yes. When I finish my education (? diese wortwahl gibt es so im engl. eigentlich nciht), I would like to go to university. My greatest dream is to become a psychologist.


R.: We are sure that you will realize your dream. A beautiful profession you`ve chosen. But why do you want to go in this direction?


M.: I want to help other people dealing with problems. Many people think that there are no solutions for their problems. These people need help. Today I am firmly (? vllt. besser absolutely) convinced that there is (es gibt= there is, it gives gibt es im englischen nicht!) a solution for any problem. You only need to ask for help. It`s a terrible feeling to feel alone and when you are desperate. In those situation you might make very big mistakes. Mistakes, you later regret. I would like to help those people, who contact me and ask for help.

R.: It seems as if your own feelings, experiences and mistakes have had some influence on your career aspiration.

M.: Yes. Amongst these aspects also play a role. (was willst du hier genau zum ausdruck bringen? das die erfahrungen auch eine rolle spielen neben o.g. oder die vortreffliche motivation sind?)

R.: We would like to thank you sincerely for the time you`ve made for us (= die Zeit, die du für uns gemacht hast? wie macht man zeit?) and wish you the very best for your future.

Hey,
ich hab das nur grob korrigiert, bei einigen Sachen versteh ich nicht, was du meinst / ausdrücken willst.
Ich hoffe, das hilft trotzdem.
LG,
Wiebke

Das nette Mädel hat schon einiges dabei, hier wäre meine Version - dann kannst du zwei unterschiedliche Korrekturen vergleichen. :)

R.: Hello Martin. We would like to ask you a few questions.
As we know, you`re 15 years old, are living in Eastbourne and visit -which?- school. Like many people in YOUR life, you HAVE also had a hard time SO FAR. We DO not want to ELABORATE on THAT. We WOULD LIKE TO KNOW if you ALREADY feel better?

M.: Thank you. I feel better. I am trying to forget the mistake that I HAVE made.

R.: It is GREAT to hear that you feel good.
You are currently visiting -which?- school. What are your PLANS FOR THE future? Can you tell us something about THAT?

M.: Yes. AFTER HAVING FINISHED my education, I would like to ATTEND UNIVERSITY. My greatest dream is to become a psychologist.

R.: We are sure that you will MAKE your dream COME TRUE. YOU HAVE CHOSEN a -beautiful?- profession. (Beautiful ist leider kein Adjektiv, das man im Zusammenhang mit Berufen verwendet. Interesting, sensible, important, challenging....?) But why do you want to go inTO THAT direction?

M.: I want to help other people with THEIR problems (oder: help other people who have problems). Many people think that there are no solutions for their problems. These people need help. Today I am firmly convinced that THERE IS! (UAH!) a solution for every problem. You ONLY HAVE TO ask for help. It`s a terrible feeling when you feel alone and when you are desperate. In these cases you can make HUGE mistakes. Mistakes KEIN KOMMA THAT you WILL regret later. I want to help people.... meinst du: who contact me?

R.: It looks AS IF (entweder "like" oder "as if", nie beides) your own feelings, experiences and mistakes have some influence reGARDING your career aspirationS.

M.: Yes. NEXT TO OTHERS KOMMA these aspects also play a PART.

R.: We SINCERELY thank you for thE time you`ve TAKEN TO TALK TO US and wish you success FOR your future.



Korrigiert sind sprachliche Fehler, was den Stil angeht habe ich nichts geändert - das soll schließlich trotz aller Korrekturen DEIN Text bleiben. :)

ist - mit den von uns genannten ausnahmen - recht gut lesbar und akzeptabel. Aber verbessern kannst du dich immer noch! ;)