Hilfe bei Englisch Hausaufgabe (+Korrektur)

Hallo , ich brauche Hilfe bei meinen Englisch Hausaufgaben , da ich in Englisch einfach nicht gut bin und die Hausaufgabe wie ein Vokabeltest gewertet wird :). Ich hoffe mir kann jemand helfen.

Die Aufgabe war : Is Europe united ? (Hier muss man sein eigenes Statement abgeben) 300 Wörter müssen geschrieben werden,bis jetzt habe ich ca.250.
Also zuwenig , ich hoffe das jemand die Fehler verbessern kann bzw auch styl verbesserungen hat (auch wenn es hier nicht zu krass sein sollte) da es ja nicht so auffällig sein soll das ich hilfe bekommen habe.

Schonmal vielen lieben dank !

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Is Europe united ?
It is often said that Europe is united ,but i think Europe is not united , however they are on the right way to be like a Unity.
One the one hand due to historical and cultural differences it is hard to form a united Europe, but on the other hand the European
Union try to unite Europe with for example its single European market,free passenger traffic and the exchange of goods and services.

Also the government of the memberstates work together to afford the citizens of the European Union a better life.

A very important point , are the open bordes , wich allow to travel and to work everywhere and nearly with no problems.
From my point of view this is very important and this encourages the social communication between the different people of the countrys.

First of all,many for example Germans does not feel themselves European but rather German.So they have more a National identity
than a European Identity,i think this is because the differences between the memberstates are too big at the moment by reason of former differences
in historical and cultural thinking.

Furthermore,an other possibility that the citizens of the European Union feels not united is that they are scared.
In particular the old generation have problems with mind of a united Europe ,of course because they are not grown up in the European era
like the generation from today.247